Undergraduate / Peace Corps essay-"Describe living in a social cultural environment different.." [6]

Wonderful essay, good points made, on-topic.

It's not all about the grammar but I noticed this: "As the new girl from America, all eyes were on me and I felt..." That's a misplaced modifier or indefinite reference or something like that. One way to fix it would be, "As the new girl from America, I felt that all eyes were on me and that..."