Posts by McPressler

McPressler

Aug 5, 2010

Graduate / "Career vision" vs. "most passionate about" - what is the difference? [10]

As much as I agree that both can be considered academic questions relating to your future career, the admissions office may want to know a little bit more about you besides your passion to read law books or to write research papers relating to your studies. I think the passionate question allows you to expand upon your other interests outside of your studies. Schools want to know that you are a well rounded adult who is capable of making decisions not only in the eductional world but in the real world as well.

Passions could include reading, family, etc. Imagine what would be absolute necessity in your future life.

- Good luck

McPressler

Aug 5, 2010

Undergraduate / Purdue Essay - "Superwoman" [3]

serogers 32,

I think its great that you manage an entire 80 person staff. That is definately commendable. Also, your idea of being a "superwoman" is a unique twist to a modern day gal of success. Still, I believe your essay focuses a little too much on your theories of how a good leader should act and what personal characteristics they should have. I think your best shot at improving this essay is telling the admissions WHY you like being a part of the newspaper. Also I would instead of telling them what you do, describe an experience in which you exemplify great leadership skills and hardwork.

If your saying u manage a newspaper you should be able to wow them with your esssay with the unspoken assumption you are able to communicate effectively through your own writing. I would suggest creating an image instead of just a paragraph of words.

Best of luck! :)

McPressler

Jul 30, 2010

Undergraduate / "a career that challenges and sharpens my skill set" - The Ohio State University [4]

Thanks both of you, i think i am just going to start from scratch and rewrite it. I can see how banal it really is.

McPressler

Jul 27, 2010

Undergraduate / "a career that challenges and sharpens my skill set" - The Ohio State University [4]

Alright so I could just use some advice because I feel like my essay is lacking some meat, maybe it is, maybe it isn't....Let me know.

The Question is: In 300 words or less, why are you considering The Ohio State University?

Three locations: Peoria, Illinois, Menominee, Michigan, and Milan, Italy. My father's career began with an undergraduate degree in chemical engineering from The OSU and progressed through the three places where I grew up. My dad's experience at The Ohio State University continues to permeate his life; as his legacy, I have great expectations for my experience in Columbus, Ohio on the OSU campus.

It could be the bookstore or that perfect bench next to that perfect campus tree. Some evaluate universities based on what it offers them, but in my perspective, it should rely on what I bring to it. I will bring international experience, leadership skills, an open mind, and respect for my environment. My drive and personality will complement the OSU O-H-I-O spirit, tradition, and academic vigor.

Always competitive, I am interested in a career that challenges and sharpens my skill set. Business marketing is a fast paced, energizing field. I would thoroughly enjoy the prospect of related travel, maintaining the life and experiences I have accumulated to now. Ohio State has an excellent reputation and was an important milestone in my father's career. OSU is not only family tradition as my father's parents, siblings, and several of my cousins have attended the university, but will support the success of my life-time goals of.

With such a large undergraduate student body, I understand OSU Admission has many applicants to consider, and I would be grateful if you considered my candidacy.