Writing Feedback / 'Love, money, career and faith in God' IELTS Happiness essay [4]

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving hapiness? please evaluate my ielts essay

Happiness is something we all desire, but not many achieve. There is no universally accepted definition for happiness, as its coordinates differ from one to another. However, I believe there are several factors people cite when asked about the ingredients needed for the 'happiness recipe'.

To begin with, it is a well-known fact that every person in this world is unique and consequently it is normal that every one has its own aspirations and beliefs. What makes a person happy might not work as well for another one. Therefore, it is difficult to define happiness, but I think every one would agree with this: happiness consists in and is strongly connected with things that makes us happy.

Love, money, career and faith in God are the factors generally mentioned/agreed as important in
achieving happiness. Furthermore, every person has its own value system in which all of the factors mentioned above are disposed gradually. To give an example from my personal experience, my grandmother was a very religious person and her faith in God and love for her nephews were enough to keep her happy. Rather, there are many persons who put money or career on the foreground.

On the contrary, there are some spiritual leaders, including Osho, who say that happiness is not something you practice, but something that comes to you when you allow it. One argument that cannot be ignored to sustain this is that there are many times when we hear about people who achieved everything they wanted in their life, but still felt anxious, unhappy, unfulfilled.Osho said that happiness comes when we feel free, relaxed and are focused on love.

To sum up, I believe the best way to achieve happiness is to first think of our value scale and decide which factor is the most important to us. Then we should try to become succesful in that way, having a positive attitude towards life. We sometimes try so hard to be happy and to achieve our goal, that we forgot to do things that make us happy.

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Writing Feedback / Media for communicating information: • comics • books • radio • television • film [6]

Good evening. I will soon have my Ielts test and I would really appreciate if anyone could check my essay written below.

Write about the following topic:
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.
- comics - books - radio - television - film - theatre

So, here it goes:

Nowadays information is accessible to almost everyone in this world. We can exchange ideas and broaden our horizon with the help of the means of communication & Media such as comics, books, radio, television, film or theatre. However, I believe not all these provide good quality information and I will try to analyze them.

First of all, I would like to compare two ways of broadcasting information, namely TV and books. In my opinion, books are much more useful than Tv is and I believe there are several reasons to sustain this. One argument is that Tv addresses the large public and ussually transmits information that catches the eye of the audience, with themes such as violence, erotism, politics and humuour. Another argument would be that we usually don't know what we are going to watch when we turn on the Tv. On the contrary, we usually read a book that has been recommended to us. Thus, there are more chances to find interesting things in a book that was first read by a trustful friend than they are when we watck Tv.

Let's not pass to film and theatre. I believe these are very effective beacause you can read a review first and decide if it meets your interest. Even more, many films and plays are inspired by real life stories and one can draw a lesson from them. A film or a play is normally very attractive means of media and consequently are easier to be kept in mind and have a stronger impact on us, comparing to comics or radio.

My own experience makes me consider the books as the most effective means of media because I have always learnt many useful things from them. They are very instructively, mainly because they comprise the writer's thought and life experience and are usually written over a large period of time.

As a conclusion, I think we should be more selective when receiving information from the media, as not all its means offer what we are looking for.

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