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Posts by rosadia
Joined: Nov 26, 2006
Last Post: Nov 29, 2006
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rosadia   
Nov 29, 2006
Undergraduate / Great things don't come easy; UC Admission [6]

I understand where you are coming from because my parents are Chinese too. Great essay, but other than emphasizing how poor your parents were and how they had to work on a farm, why not emphasize on how you "wil lchange the lives of the people around the world" and what you can do at the University of California?

Just a suggestion. Feel free to comment my essays too
rosadia   
Nov 29, 2006
Undergraduate / 'Growing up Belmont, San Francisco' - undergraduate Essay [3]

Sarah,

Thank you for spending so much time and effort on my essay. I truly appreciate your help and I'm very touched. Your suggestions are incredibly helpful. I will continue to improve my essay by Thursday! Thanks again!

-Maria Ho
rosadia   
Nov 28, 2006
Undergraduate / 'Growing up Belmont, San Francisco' - undergraduate Essay [3]

Thank you, Sarah, for your help on those last three essays!

UC ESSAY #3

Growing up in Belmont, San Francisco with two younger brothers, my life was perfect. Although I failed to appreciate and value my life, I was innocent and unaware of all the pain and suffering in the world, more closely, at home. I went to a catholic private school, Immaculate Heart of Mary, joined Girl Scouts as a Daisy, and was involved in gymnastics and ballet. We had the warmth of family friends all around us in the perfect community; resembling the perfect life.

Oblivious to my family's financial problems, I refused to move to another city, especially one that was on the other side of home, Hong Kong. Within a year and a half, my family moved to Shanghai for the same reason. Over the course of those years, I have learned a lot mentally and socially.

The cities for one were similar in the way that it was urban and cosmopolitan. But the languages spoken were not the same and so were the lifestyles of locals. I have learned much from living in both cities, learning to communicate with people, navigating my path to the destination, assimilating myself culturally into the various societies present. The experience in itself was a lesson for me to connect myself with my own ethnic background.

In the three years in Asia, I attended four different international schools, which was personally very dissimilar from a small private school in the states. As I was socially more exposed to activities such as camp outs, sewing classes, clay-modeling, and such from getting an international schooling education, I was eager to make the same kind of friends that I made back at home. I felt that all the people I grew up with as children had disappeared from my life. I missed my friends and family. So I decided to continue with Girl Scouts and ballet classes like I had done in San Francisco. But whenever I began to "settle" with new groups of friends, it was always time to move again from city to city, school to school. Through many indescribable emotional pains of unsteadiness and uncertainty through these years, I have always unconsciously placed my social life as a first priority.

Most of my attention throughout my high school career was spent on extra-curricular activities than on academics. This was partly because of my need for sociality. However, my junior year was deeply impacted by the increasing number of on-going activities.

Taking AP English was a challenge for me. Not only is it my first honors English class ever, but it is also an advanced college course. I worked hard to improve my grade throughout both semesters.

I discovered an academic weakness during my junior year when I decided to take the science course, Physics CP. Although it is a regular course, my intelligence is incomparable to its standards of concept and work. After many attempts of trying in after school and out of school workshop and tutoring, Physics is just an impossible course for me.

Most of my time was invested into C-HIGH TV productions, resulting in my staying after school for hours ranging from 6 to 8:30 pm at night, and other activities I had outside of school. This accumulation of time, I regret, was not spent on the proper priority, thus, as an example of this lack of time, AP US History, carried a failing grade.
rosadia   
Nov 26, 2006
Undergraduate / 'Mass communication today' - University Ca Essays [6]

Even after participating in the Girl Scouts program for more than nine years, I didn't see myself as one of the girls who were outspoken and opinionated. Currently, as Senior Girl Scouts, my troop and others are in charge of organizing activities to help the younger girls learn and experience more about themselves, as well as helping others, demonstrating skills and similar pursuits. I participated in all these endeavors, but I did not perform in a leadership role within the troop.

As the founder of our school's Junior Statesmen of America chapter, I have learned a lot about people, and myself. Over my academic career and through my various experiences in public speaking, I have developed an aptitude for acting professionally and diplomatically, along with an ability to effectively communicate my opinions, especially in debate situations. In my junior year, many arguments and conflicts arose from the different perspectives of the cabinet officers. All of us in the chapter were new, including our club advisor, who had no previous experience with JSA. In the end, we all learned something about each other, and ourselves.

Now, JSA has improved greatly from last year. This year we have co-advisors, and more understanding and helpful officers. It definitely takes experience to make an organization better. I cannot say that it has been an easy job to maintain the stability of a new club on campus, or to make certain that all tasks are completed. However, it has been one of the greatest lessons of my high school career.

My experience with JSA has helped me learn to believe in people, while exercising caution at the same time. Moreover, it has given me confidence in public speaking and organizing events for club members, and the ability to apply this to my whole life. Now in Girl Scouts, I am no longer afraid to speak up or advise, or to raise questions about upcoming events and projects. So from this long trail of experience, I believe I can contribute leadership. I believe in myself and have the confidence to guide others along their own paths of self-discovery.
rosadia   
Nov 26, 2006
Undergraduate / 'Mass communication today' - University Ca Essays [6]

Unaware of the rigors of the program, I was pressured by my parents and peers to enter the Model United Nations (MUN) at school, which required that I participate in debates. After struggling through two weeks of class, I desperately wanted to drop it. All the students were confident and assertive, and unafraid to express themselves; I, on the other hand, was lonely, shy, and lacking in self-esteem. In time, however, I began to overcome my fear of other people's opinions of me, and eventually conquered my apprehension about public speaking. The conferences we attended over weekends and during school gave me an opportunity to meet new people and to see the various ways people express themselves in speech and thought. Vocalizing my assertions became second nature, as long as I had done my research well and was fully prepared. There was no need to fear anything--least of all myself.

-Maria Ho

Following my stint in MUN, I pursued more experience in debate by narrowing focus from the international arena to issues that struck closer to home. I founded the Junior Statesmen of America (JSA) chapter at my school. By doing so, I was able to continue pursuing my passion for the subjects I care about the most: leading and inspiring debate on important topics, and involvement in the political world. Most important of all, I was afforded the opportunity to help others get engaged with the issues that affect our nation. I still run this chapter today.

My interest in communications didn't stop there. I decided to join C-HIGH TV, a new broadcasting program that airs every day at my school. I became one of the main anchors. The preparation was always painstaking, but worth the effort. This experience led to my decision to pursue a career in mass communications in college.

Mass communications today are no longer limited to the verbal domain, as technology and visual expression have become inextricably tied to global communications. To gain experience in the more technical aspects of communication, I successfully applied to the school's yearbook team and trained myself in the use of design programs such as InDesign and Photoshop, later taking the skills with me to the Southeast Regional Occupation Program, in which I honed my skills in expert graphic design. These abilities give me a firm foundation in mass communications that I am eager to build upon in a university program.
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