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Aug 9, 2010
Poetry / 1 sense poem 'When I'm at the beach I hear... [9]

When I think of the beach
I hear...
Water rippling against the shore,
Screaming children,
Scolding parents,
The crunch of fresh fish and chips, being devoured without a thought
And teenage girls lying in the sun, gossiping animatedly,
My ears range out to the chime of bells,
Signaling danger in the waves,
As people splash about in panic,
Running for the shore,

I not sure it's very good and I want to add more (obviously). btw, I don't want any rhyme.

So, how do I make it better, and what should I write next?

Fanx! xoxo <3
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