Undergraduate / "I faced my fears" - College Admission Test Essay [5]

can someone help me out on my essay..

this is my draft... i'm never good at writing essays

As i was a kid, i lack the confidence to reach what i aim for.I was shy and silent, i was the kid who never started conversations.

When i grew Older,I improved my self esteem and increase my confidence by facing my fears, forgetting all failures and learning from them. I became an assertive person, i always look up to my goal of finishing my school and having a stable job, even if i don't excel much at school, i still give what i can to prove to myself that i can do it to make my family proud of me . For me it's thinking outside the box by going out your comfort zone and immersing yourself in an unimaginably different experience, that makes you somehow see yourself mor clearly. To contribute a big part in this school.

Im looking forward that this school will improve me even more academically and make me perform more socially.