Undergraduate / 'I grew up here, in Ohio' - Why are you interested in Ohio State? [5]

This is my addmissions essay for ohio state " Why are you interested in Ohio State?" and i would like to get some input on things i could change or do better on.

Ohio State is a great school that is known for their high academic standards as well as their student body leadership programs. I am interested in a school that will not only challenge me mentally but will also fit my personality and I see Ohio State as a perfect fit for me. In high school I took many leadership roles in clubs, as well as in my class and I know that attending Ohio State, it will help me grow as a leader and learn about my self in the process. A big draw for me from the school is the top nursing program it provides. I plan on becoming a nurse anesthetist and will have to earn a nursing degree first but I know receiving a degree from this well respected program will not only give me the knowledge but the confidence to enter this competitive field.

Growing up in Ohio I have had family and friends that have attended Ohio State and have seen and heard how the experience has shaped their lives. My family members' say it was the best time of their lives and that the teaching staff is amazing, from hearing these reviews it show that the experience is more then words on paper. I am quite interested in the cultural experience of the campus due to the fact I am from such a small town. I love to watch football and be around the excitement of school events, so having the Ohio State football team that goes along with this magnificent school is only a perk. There is many reason I am interested in this school from its academics to sport programs but the main reason I have chosen to apply to Ohio State is for the pure fact that I feel it fits me and really represent who I am and will hopefully be shaped into.

Undergraduate / My mom - Most influential person essay [4]

This essay is for college admission on the most influential person in my life and i would like your help editing it and getting your suggestions on it.

Throughout my life I have had many people that have influenced me, but the most influential of them all is my mom. My mom has earned this rank because she reflects the picture of a strong, independent woman. Her strength comes from within, acquired by the hardships she has faced. The reason I admire her strength is the fact that she was able to end a bad marriage for the sake of her children, and kept fighting for years later to ensure their safety, away from the very man she was trying to break free from in the first place.

She is an example of a great mother who has brought up three children on her own, and who has yet lived a good life with the help from few. She has made me understand the quote "When there is a will, there is a way", and this surely did make a difference to me. From this I focus on my goals and work hard to excel at them. My mom worked as a nurse and would wake up early to make sure we got off to school and then worked a twelve hour day. I admire my mother for the compassion she is gives towards others. The way she relates her experiences and her perception on others' problems, she is able to help them, thus showing understanding and compassion. When her friend was involved in a bad relationship she was there for her and advised her and brought her back on the right track. All of these characteristics from my mom have shaped me and made me the person I am today, and that is why I look at my mom as the most influential person in my life.