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Writing Feedback / THE CAY, story about one trip in the in Caribbean Sea [8]
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The story took place in small island (Cay) which is in Caribbean sea near the Venezuela. the characters for this story Phillip and Timothy.
Phillip and Timothy were on a small ship in Caribbean Sea in 1942. One night, a German ship attacked their ship and it went down. Timothy pulled Phillip into a lifeboat. While they were in the lifeboat Phillip went blind. Then they arrived at the Cay. In this island Timothy died because there was stronge storm.then the Phillip become alone. After two days one eroplane came and saw his a fire, after that one boat came to relife him , the boat driver took him to hospital, Phillip became see again,he came back to his family but he was sad about his friend Timothy.
Opinion
This story has important information and the auther listed it in simplified manner and concept words . I like this story because it has easy words , in avarage levels and the order for it was nice, also this story has some pictures to clear the main idea .
I learned from story how to spend your life in critical time and how to looking for food in the sea also how to inform others if you have problem or you miss your road, I advise every one to read it because it is very interesting and useful also it has comprehension to used to understand fast, furthermore ,there are connection among its shapters ,in addition to many series of it in different leveles.In contrast, there is one point was n't clear! which is the reason for , why the boat stop in a Cay island and it doesn't continue to their island ?
Conclution
Literary reading stories continuing the best way to learn. Literery give you alot of knowledge .when I read this story I understand how can I choose a suitable wards and how to make plot because the meaning and vocabulary was clear.so I chose this book as it contains many of the concepts of value and style as well as authers in the storytelling wonderful,so the story is very good to interesting and comprehension,finally I recommend every one to read it due to it is useful to improve your grammer,it has a common wards which we used it daily in our live.
can you check please?
The story took place in small island (Cay) which is in Caribbean sea near the Venezuela. the characters for this story Phillip and Timothy.
Phillip and Timothy were on a small ship in Caribbean Sea in 1942. One night, a German ship attacked their ship and it went down. Timothy pulled Phillip into a lifeboat. While they were in the lifeboat Phillip went blind. Then they arrived at the Cay. In this island Timothy died because there was stronge storm.then the Phillip become alone. After two days one eroplane came and saw his a fire, after that one boat came to relife him , the boat driver took him to hospital, Phillip became see again,he came back to his family but he was sad about his friend Timothy.
Opinion
This story has important information and the auther listed it in simplified manner and concept words . I like this story because it has easy words , in avarage levels and the order for it was nice, also this story has some pictures to clear the main idea .
I learned from story how to spend your life in critical time and how to looking for food in the sea also how to inform others if you have problem or you miss your road, I advise every one to read it because it is very interesting and useful also it has comprehension to used to understand fast, furthermore ,there are connection among its shapters ,in addition to many series of it in different leveles.In contrast, there is one point was n't clear! which is the reason for , why the boat stop in a Cay island and it doesn't continue to their island ?
Conclution
Literary reading stories continuing the best way to learn. Literery give you alot of knowledge .when I read this story I understand how can I choose a suitable wards and how to make plot because the meaning and vocabulary was clear.so I chose this book as it contains many of the concepts of value and style as well as authers in the storytelling wonderful,so the story is very good to interesting and comprehension,finally I recommend every one to read it due to it is useful to improve your grammer,it has a common wards which we used it daily in our live.
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Writing Feedback / THE CAY, story about one trip in the in Caribbean Sea [8]
please can you this story for me?
THE CAY
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In the end Phillip was alone with his cat ,he was very sad and he cried very much ,
Then he put Timthy under the sand and return to his house ,he repair every thing and wrote the help word also he made a big fire, after two days the airplane came to the island and saw him ,then two men with a boat came to him and took him with his cat ,they asked him about every thing and he answered them , they brought him to the hospital and he set about 4 months to treat his eyes and he became see again,he came back to his family in WILLEMSTAD city but he was sad about his friend Timothy .
please can you this story for me?
THE CAY
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In the end Phillip was alone with his cat ,he was very sad and he cried very much ,
Then he put Timthy under the sand and return to his house ,he repair every thing and wrote the help word also he made a big fire, after two days the airplane came to the island and saw him ,then two men with a boat came to him and took him with his cat ,they asked him about every thing and he answered them , they brought him to the hospital and he set about 4 months to treat his eyes and he became see again,he came back to his family in WILLEMSTAD city but he was sad about his friend Timothy .
