Undergraduate / Describe the proposed field to study in Australia - Help me, revise it [2]

Describe the proposed field you wish to study in Australia and why you have selected this field. In your answer you should explain:

i. How your proposed study is related to your work experience; and
ii. What specific skills and knowledge you hope to gain from this study.

Help me revise and commend the ideas are not good, thank you very much indeed.
Population growth, rapid urbanization, and increasing water supply and sanitation provision will all generate increased problems from wastewater pollution and water scarcity. In order to overcome these challenges, it is essential for Vietnam providing suitable water and wastewater management plans and having well trained environmental engineers and managers. Therefore, I want to pursue the Master programme in Water and Wastewater Management to obtain both theoretical abilities and applicable skills on a higher level that I can broaden and deepen my knowledge. Working at the Department of Environment where we train students to be professional environmental managers and engineers. I always have to continuously improve myself by obtaining the knowledge and skills of modern environmental management systems to become an excellent teacher and an expert in this field. Participating in this course is the best chance for me to fulfill my goals. Moreover, I really want this program not only provides me with specialised training in sustainable water and wastewater management but also equips me with the required knowledge in the planning, design, implementation and management of projects in water and wastewater industries. Besides, I have gained many experiences through my involvement in researching on wastewater treatment and projects such as: Strengthen the capacity of Vietnamese communities to facilitate and promote community-based environmental management to protect Tan Hoa - Lo Gom canal, Research on the applicability of Life Cycle Management in the shrimp processing enterprises in Ho Chi Minh City Vietnam, and researching on Applying biological technology combined with the up-flow sludge blanket filter (USBF) to treat municipal wastewater...etc. With skills and knowledge I had learned, I strongly believe that I can easily cope with the MSc programme in Water and Wastewater Management.

Writing Feedback / Why do you want to do the short course to which you have been admitted? [NEW]

"Why do you want to do the short course to which you have been admitted?

In Vietnam, accompanied with rapid and unsustainable economical development , environmental pollution has become a threat to our lives and heath, environmental management is the only way to work towards sustainable development. That is why it is essential to have well trained environmental managers. Short courses in environmental management from the Netherlands, a successful country in environmental protection, are precious opportunities for Vietnam. Working at the Department of Environment, where we train students to be environmental managers and engineers, I always have to continuously improve myself by obtaining the knowledge and skills of modern environmental management systems to become a good teacher. Participating in this course is a good chance to me to fulfill my goals.

What do you hope to achieve for your organization by doing this short course?

The knowledge and skills I will gain from this course are highly valuable not only for environmental management systems in Vietnam but also for my organization. I will share all of them with my colleagues at the Department of Environment so that they can update themselves and teach for their students. Furthermore, I will share my knowledge with my students and apply them in my further scientific research. In addition, Faculty of Environmental Technology is a newly formed faculty - what I learn from this course would be useful and helpful to us in choosing better solutions for environmental management projects."