joytierra011
Sep 6, 2010
Undergraduate / "As an adolescent I began to take a destructive path" -Obstacles or bumps in the road [3]
1. If there has been some obstacle or "bump in the road," in your academic or personal life, please explain the circumstances.
If you would please offer some advices about what is wrong with my essay, grammar,structure, etc. what needs to be corrected? thank you
Many people go through so much everyday but instead of getting down about life we pick ourselves up and move on. Me personally I feel that I had to deal with more than the average child should have to go through. No child should have to wake up in the middle of the night to go look for their mother when their only six years old. Well I did; my mother was addicted to drugs and chose them over spending time with her own children. At the tender age of seven I was taken away from her and put into foster care. From there my sister and I were split up, even though we were joined together again the pain was still felt. December was the month that I moved from Virginia to Florida for any seven year old this would be hard but it was unusually hard for me because I constantly blamed myself for what was going on with my mother. At my age I couldn't understand that what she was dealing with stemmed from something personal within her. As the years went by the image of her inside my head slowly diminished, but as I became an adolescent I began to take a destructive path because all I wanted was someone that cared and someone that wouldn't run out on me. It was a struggle within myself but I quickly realized that my past does not determine my future. And after that epiphany I quickly worked as hard as I could to get as far as I am now. Grasping the fact that every great person had to go through some type of adversity I know that something great and successful will be made out of me. A bump in the road is either an obstacle to be fought or an opportunity to be enjoyed...it is all up to you." -Davet Rayala
1. If there has been some obstacle or "bump in the road," in your academic or personal life, please explain the circumstances.
If you would please offer some advices about what is wrong with my essay, grammar,structure, etc. what needs to be corrected? thank you
Many people go through so much everyday but instead of getting down about life we pick ourselves up and move on. Me personally I feel that I had to deal with more than the average child should have to go through. No child should have to wake up in the middle of the night to go look for their mother when their only six years old. Well I did; my mother was addicted to drugs and chose them over spending time with her own children. At the tender age of seven I was taken away from her and put into foster care. From there my sister and I were split up, even though we were joined together again the pain was still felt. December was the month that I moved from Virginia to Florida for any seven year old this would be hard but it was unusually hard for me because I constantly blamed myself for what was going on with my mother. At my age I couldn't understand that what she was dealing with stemmed from something personal within her. As the years went by the image of her inside my head slowly diminished, but as I became an adolescent I began to take a destructive path because all I wanted was someone that cared and someone that wouldn't run out on me. It was a struggle within myself but I quickly realized that my past does not determine my future. And after that epiphany I quickly worked as hard as I could to get as far as I am now. Grasping the fact that every great person had to go through some type of adversity I know that something great and successful will be made out of me. A bump in the road is either an obstacle to be fought or an opportunity to be enjoyed...it is all up to you." -Davet Rayala
