collegebound707
Sep 10, 2010
Undergraduate / "I have prepared as best as I can" - UF - Rough Draft needs editing [3]
Please give as much criticism as you can, all feedback is welcome. If you have an essay you'd like me to critique let me know and I would be happy to do so. Thank you
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In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.
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When I was younger I knew everything, or at least I thought I did. Anytime there was a chance for me to speak up and sound smart I took it without hesitation. It would drive my parents crazy when I would argue with them over insignificant things and try to find loopholes in their rules. I didn't do it to annoy them I just wanted everyone to notice and respect me but from this experience I have learned that you don't gain respect just by knowing a bunch of random information. You earn it by being humble and letting your actions speak for themselves. I learned this valuable but often overlooked lesson in my freshman year of high school.
Throughout middle school I was able to earn A's on my report card with ease. Most of the time I did not need to take notes or study to do well on the exams. When I moved on to high school however, everything changed. Although the teachers had warned us that we would not do well in their classes without taking notes or studying I refused to listen. I continued to use the same careless habits that had worked for me in middle school. When Mrs. O'Neil, my math teacher, handed back my first test and I saw the grade, I was surprised to see that I had barely passed. I got similar grades in some of my other classes and by the end of the first quarter I felt disappointed and frustrated that I was not doing well. I came to the realization that I was not at all prepared for high school and that my old habits from middle school were not working. It was not easy and did not happen suddenly but over the next few weeks I got into the routine of taking notes and studying them before each test. Just taking a few minutes of each day and going back over the material helped me tremendously. It was that first semester of high school that humbled me and made me realize that there was more to intelligence than memorization and that if I wanted to succeed in school I needed to work hard at actually understanding the information.
For the rest of my high school career I have tried to prepare myself for the next big leap from high school to college by taking higher level courses, using my time wisely and talking to people I know that are already in college. I hope to bring to the University of Florida not only my intelligence and character but a humble appreciation for them as well. Although I believe I have prepared as best as I can for this next transition, I am sure college will find a way to surprise me. I feel confident however that from what I have learned from this experience I will be able to get through any unforeseen obstacles.
Please give as much criticism as you can, all feedback is welcome. If you have an essay you'd like me to critique let me know and I would be happy to do so. Thank you
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In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.
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When I was younger I knew everything, or at least I thought I did. Anytime there was a chance for me to speak up and sound smart I took it without hesitation. It would drive my parents crazy when I would argue with them over insignificant things and try to find loopholes in their rules. I didn't do it to annoy them I just wanted everyone to notice and respect me but from this experience I have learned that you don't gain respect just by knowing a bunch of random information. You earn it by being humble and letting your actions speak for themselves. I learned this valuable but often overlooked lesson in my freshman year of high school.
Throughout middle school I was able to earn A's on my report card with ease. Most of the time I did not need to take notes or study to do well on the exams. When I moved on to high school however, everything changed. Although the teachers had warned us that we would not do well in their classes without taking notes or studying I refused to listen. I continued to use the same careless habits that had worked for me in middle school. When Mrs. O'Neil, my math teacher, handed back my first test and I saw the grade, I was surprised to see that I had barely passed. I got similar grades in some of my other classes and by the end of the first quarter I felt disappointed and frustrated that I was not doing well. I came to the realization that I was not at all prepared for high school and that my old habits from middle school were not working. It was not easy and did not happen suddenly but over the next few weeks I got into the routine of taking notes and studying them before each test. Just taking a few minutes of each day and going back over the material helped me tremendously. It was that first semester of high school that humbled me and made me realize that there was more to intelligence than memorization and that if I wanted to succeed in school I needed to work hard at actually understanding the information.
For the rest of my high school career I have tried to prepare myself for the next big leap from high school to college by taking higher level courses, using my time wisely and talking to people I know that are already in college. I hope to bring to the University of Florida not only my intelligence and character but a humble appreciation for them as well. Although I believe I have prepared as best as I can for this next transition, I am sure college will find a way to surprise me. I feel confident however that from what I have learned from this experience I will be able to get through any unforeseen obstacles.
