Undergraduate / "I am addicted to music" - Application Essay to University of Michigan [6]

Prompt: Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (about 250 words)

My name is <CENSORED>, and I am addicted to music. While it may be cheesy, it's kind of sad in the amount of truth is holds. Just about everyone who I spend my time with is into music in some way, shape, or form. You can already see how involved I am in the school's band program through the rest of my application. On a less formal scale, however, I've been spending a lot of time with a rock band, AriDew. While you may not choose to define this as a "community", it might as well be for me, I've spent so much of my time with them. Three of my closest friends are in it, two of which I've met through the school's band program. They keep me busy, playing bass, saxophone, and keyboards, providing backing vocals, and writing much of our material. The funny thing about it is that despite all of the time I've sunk into it, we haven't really done anything. We played at one small GAP concert, and have no plans to release a CD or anything of the sort. Which leads me to the point; I make music for the sake of making music, not for money or recognition. I mostly just enjoy our jam sessions, the feeling you get after playing something really special, or when someone else tells you how cool that one part was. Which is really the point of making music, isn't it?

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