tom_shen
Sep 23, 2010
Writing Feedback / Can computer replace teacher?; IELTS Writing Part 2 [5]
But in my opinion, I need to pratice writing essays with different topic for the IELTS test. So I will remember your advice for this one and start to write for another topic.
New Topic: Museum should be an educational or entertaining place?
In our society, there are many kinds of museums. Some people may think that they are educational places. But in my point of view, the museum is an both educational and entertaining place.
There are many examples for this, such as historical museum. History, a normal subject in school, teach statudent about the life of ancient people. While in class, student only can read the book or listen to teacher, in museum they can see the real products, wear the clothes of ancient people and play as them. The target of these activities is education but the process of these is entertain.
Another example, science museum, it provides a lot of special machines. Students can do plenty of experiments in it. For some big equipments, they need to work together and discussion. After doing this, students may find the result which is already taught in class. At that time, they just knew this, but now they understand this. They would remember this for a long period of time. On the other hand, if they find the result is different from text book, they may have more interested in doing the experiments again and again to find out the reason. At the beginning, the activity is for entertain, but at last, it become educational.
So, my conclusion is that museum should be an place for educational and entertain. It should combine the two sides into a whole.
But in my opinion, I need to pratice writing essays with different topic for the IELTS test. So I will remember your advice for this one and start to write for another topic.
New Topic: Museum should be an educational or entertaining place?
In our society, there are many kinds of museums. Some people may think that they are educational places. But in my point of view, the museum is an both educational and entertaining place.
There are many examples for this, such as historical museum. History, a normal subject in school, teach statudent about the life of ancient people. While in class, student only can read the book or listen to teacher, in museum they can see the real products, wear the clothes of ancient people and play as them. The target of these activities is education but the process of these is entertain.
Another example, science museum, it provides a lot of special machines. Students can do plenty of experiments in it. For some big equipments, they need to work together and discussion. After doing this, students may find the result which is already taught in class. At that time, they just knew this, but now they understand this. They would remember this for a long period of time. On the other hand, if they find the result is different from text book, they may have more interested in doing the experiments again and again to find out the reason. At the beginning, the activity is for entertain, but at last, it become educational.
So, my conclusion is that museum should be an place for educational and entertain. It should combine the two sides into a whole.
