Writing Feedback / Spending money on people's basic requirements or travelling to space [3]

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Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible to explore outer space (for examples travelling to the moon and other planets). Others disagree and say that this money should be spent for our basic needs on earth. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

I support the idea of investing money on uplifting the living standards rather than squander it on inexpedient project like outer space exploration. In case of, economic problems, lack of facilities and pollution crisis.

From one side, spending money on earth in order to figuring out economical problems would be more beneficial to earth's settlers. For instance, many third countries are suffering from inflation, many youth are jobless and there is not equal welfare state for all members of society. It does not seem sensible, spending much money on conquering space while enormous people on earth cannot afford to eat every day and live under their means.

Furthermore, dreaming up to discover new experiences about other planets via travelling to space and spending much money on this way could be acceptable if we had overcome most of difficulties on our maternal region. Remarkably, developing suitable education and health care infrastructure. Many children deprive from using standard education. Likewise, a large number of innocent children are dying in some undeveloped African countries because of malnutrition.

Ultimately, investing money to find practical solution about pollution has more priority in contrast to conquest of space. For example, many people are breathing polluted air and drinking contaminated water; therefore, saving our birth planet from ruining has major prominent. Many birds, animals and plants specious are in danger of extinction ; since, neglecting in allocate enough budget to explore suitable remedies for preventing pollution which has been produced by factories, cars, green house gases and acid rains.

No wonder, I stand behind the group saying that allocating money to fulfill human's basic demands has top priority. In case we accomplish the majority of requirements of the earth's inhabitants, we can devise some approaches for travelling to space.

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Writing Feedback / Having two children VS. Having More than two children in every family [6]

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Some people believe that families should not have more than two children. Others believe that they can have as many children as they wish. Which opinion do you support? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

I subscribe to this view that people should avoid having more than two children since insufficient natural resources, limited facilities and inadequate parents' time and energy to allocate each kid.

From one side, giving birth to more than two children in every family undoubtedly leads deficiency in many natural resources. World's natural resources are not good enough for the giant population who their life is completely dependent on them. For instance, nowadays we are witnessing energy crisis in whole of the world; fossil fuels that almost every person uses for transport are running out. Likewise, renewing these valuable resources takes many times; thus, neglecting explosion population would become more likely a catastrophe in future.

Furthermore, before inviting new kids to this world, we should think about their requiredfacilities. If the infrastructure of cities does not grow at the same rate of rising population, the result will impose some strains on this innocent generation. Such as, lack of education facilities, health services and housing problems.

Ultimately, people should not have more than two children, as it costs them too much effort and time; since, for nurturing proper children, parents should have adequate time and energy to give each child. For example, unfortunately in many populated families, parents abandon their children and do not care about their upbringing due to lack of ability and time to concentrate on their education. Most of crowded families are too lenient because parents could not track behavior of each child and focus on trend of his education.

To sum up, I stand behind supporters of having maximum two children. In this way, wecan save our world from energy crisis; in addition, we do not need cost a lot to fulfill requirements of that over population. In the end, it is crystal clear that parents have limited effort; hence, they cannot be successful in upbringing five or six children like one or two children. Having lower children more probably beneficial to both parents and kids.

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