Dantebrown
Oct 3, 2010
Undergraduate / "What it took to get me from there to here" Common app essay [7]
no problem man, i appreciate the advice
no problem man, i appreciate the advice
Dantebrown
Oct 2, 2010
Undergraduate / "What it took to get me from there to here" Common app essay [7]
Thanks! i kind of figured i was going a bit off topic. That was just my first two paragraphs of my essay, not the full essay. But since the common app essay is not for just one individual school but a number of schools, how could i successfully talk about a school in my essay without coming off as i don't know much about the other ones?
Thanks! i kind of figured i was going a bit off topic. That was just my first two paragraphs of my essay, not the full essay. But since the common app essay is not for just one individual school but a number of schools, how could i successfully talk about a school in my essay without coming off as i don't know much about the other ones?
Dantebrown
Oct 2, 2010
Undergraduate / "What it took to get me from there to here" Common app essay [7]
I would like brief feedback on the start of my common app transfer essay
Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.
My mom never got to see me graduate. I knew my grades were not good enough to land me into a respectable college so I only applied to one local college based on the affordability and I was rejected. In all honestly, it was not a surprise. I wasted away four years of school with my lack of effort and the inability to recognize my potential. I finally realized that community college was the only option. I had contemplated if I was making the right choice to further my education. I decided that I would attend college the following spring. Since I was not in school, I decided to get a job in the meantime. My job entailed me selling footwear and other related products. I excelled and was often the top salesperson in the store. Since I was not in school, I worked 40 hour weeks and had the opportunity to work a lot with the assistant managers and learn new tasks. I learned a great amount on how the company operates.
I enrolled into Erie Community College majoring in criminal justice. I have very little idea of what I wanted to do with criminal justice, it was just something that interested me at the time. Throughout out the course of that semester I realized that I undoubtedly picked the wrong major. The classes did not spark an interest in me at all. I repeated In retrospect, I know I was not ready for college. Next semester, I switched my major to communications and knew I had made the right choice.
-Brown, Danté
I would like brief feedback on the start of my common app transfer essay
Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.
My mom never got to see me graduate. I knew my grades were not good enough to land me into a respectable college so I only applied to one local college based on the affordability and I was rejected. In all honestly, it was not a surprise. I wasted away four years of school with my lack of effort and the inability to recognize my potential. I finally realized that community college was the only option. I had contemplated if I was making the right choice to further my education. I decided that I would attend college the following spring. Since I was not in school, I decided to get a job in the meantime. My job entailed me selling footwear and other related products. I excelled and was often the top salesperson in the store. Since I was not in school, I worked 40 hour weeks and had the opportunity to work a lot with the assistant managers and learn new tasks. I learned a great amount on how the company operates.
I enrolled into Erie Community College majoring in criminal justice. I have very little idea of what I wanted to do with criminal justice, it was just something that interested me at the time. Throughout out the course of that semester I realized that I undoubtedly picked the wrong major. The classes did not spark an interest in me at all. I repeated In retrospect, I know I was not ready for college. Next semester, I switched my major to communications and knew I had made the right choice.
-Brown, Danté
