Undergraduate / "Love for all kind of sports" - extracurricular activities, common application. [4]

Thank you very much for your reply. Here's what I changed/added :

I personally love all kind of sports. I am in the athletics team of Monaco since I'm 13 and I'm specialised in cross-county. I also did Aikido, diving, circus, and 3 years of gymnastics because I like being able to do various things, but athletics really enabled me to see what I'm capable of. Throughout this sport, I realized that life is very similar to a cross-country (race?). It's about perseverance and dedication. It is mostly looking forward to the finishing line. We have to achieve our goal no matter what it takes. We can't abandon because of the pain, tiredness, or laziness; because, as in life, you don't get anything for nothing. This activity made me find strength and determination and confirmed the fact that I am a very independent person. However, I also found friends. Even if this sport is a solo sport, there is still a team, a group, and solidarity is something that I believe is very important. Helping others is something that we tend to forget and the good thing about any sports is that it makes us support each other.

I did learn a lot throughout this experience.

Is that better ? I'm not sure about my english... Hope it's alright!