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sokal393   
Nov 14, 2010
Undergraduate / "the continual guidance of these virtues" - FSU - "Vires, Artes, Mores" [4]

I'm sorry this took so long! I used one of my other essays and tried to fit it in with Florida State's topic. I feel like its more unique this way. Let me know what you think now and if this works better, or if i should try to fix up the 1st one instead...

My heart races. Adrenaline pumps through my body. I can't stand still. My thirteen years of hard work and vigorous hours in the cheerleading gym will finally pay off. In seconds, I will pass through the fog, see the flashing lights, and hear the overwhelming chanting of the over-packed crowd as I run onto the United States All Star Federation's Cheerleading Worlds competition stage in Disney World. In a moment, I will reveal to international spectators what I've worked almost my whole life to achieve - being part of the number one cheerleading team in the world. Cameras flash, and TV cameras begin to roll, as my teammates and I stampede onto the mat. Suddenly, our music blasts through the speakers and I fall into an ineffable focus. Energy bursts through my body as I showcase my most challenging skills to millions of viewers. Two minutes and thirty seconds later, exhausted, our routine is over. My teammates and I congratulate each other for hitting a near perfect routine, and gather together off the mat to watch our fellow competitors.

Ever since I was four years old, my life has been consumed with training multiple days a week, for no less than two hours a night, over an hour away from my house. Growing up in this sport, I have been able to embrace the Latin word "Vires" everyday. My lifestyle choice as an all-star cheerleader has required not only physical muscle, but moral and intellectual strength as well. Balancing life as both an athlete and a student has taught me to become a very organized person, and has helped me foster a deep sense of commitment to not only my school work, but to whatever I set my mind upon as well. Although I am a competitive person and have won many times, I have lost multiple times as well. However, my strong catholic background keeps me on track and has shown me the importance of showmanship.

As we wait for the results of the competition, I stepped through the golden gates of Disney's Wide World of Sports Complex. The brightly colored exotic uniforms worn by people from all over the world bombard my eyes, and a cacophony of different languages and dialects assaults my ears. Finally, after many years of waiting for this moment, every athlete came together for the awards to be announced. Sweats dripping down my face and my hands are shaking as the ceremony reaches the top 3. The announcer silences the crowd and states "The bronze World Championship medal goes to, South Jersey Storm!" My teammates and I spring up in excitement, hugging and congratulating each other. Even though we did not go home as number one, we are still ecstatic about all we have accomplished together as a family. As we listen to the names of the silver and gold teams, and I vow that next year will be our year, my heart races. Adrenaline pumps through my body. I can't sit still.
sokal393   
Oct 19, 2010
Undergraduate / "the continual guidance of these virtues" - FSU - "Vires, Artes, Mores" [4]

This is a really rough draft, but i wanted to know what you thought, and how you think I can make it better? Thanks so much for the help!

Essay Prompt:

For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

My Essay:

Many people view Latin as a "dead" language, but I decided to awaken my mind and challenge myself by taking Latin class this year. Although I have only been studying this subject for a few months, it has taught me so much already. Learning a new language can be tricky. Each foreign word encloses a deeper meaning waiting to be unfolded. "Vires, Artes, and Mores," three Latin words guiding the philosophy behind Florida State University, each embody profound definitions. Throughout my life, these words have played a significant role in helping me build the person I am today.

Ever since I was four years old, I have been an all-star cheerleader. Training for no less than two hours a night, multiple days a week, over an hour away from home, this sport has consumed my life. In gymnastics, tumbling can be thought of as "an acrobatic discipline." Working hard in the gym, I have embraced "Artes" by perfecting my cheerleading skills with beauty and grace, while still working hard and keeping my grades up in school. In addition to the physical and emotional strain tumbling sets on my body, it requires an ineffable focus not everyone can achieve. "Vires" has helped me acquire this concentration, providing me with strength which has enabled me to experience the thrill and exhilaration of winning a national title and top 3 worlds ranking. Along with these honors, I have been able to use my catholic background and morals to bring sportsmanship to every competition and practice, and receive an American Championship sportsmanship trophy.

Finally, "Mores" can be seen in my life through my character. Cheerleading has helped me build confidence, self respect, and a healthy lifestyle. I have learned how to work with other people through just about anything while basically living in the gym with my teammates. We shared so many of each others joys, challenges, and hardships, not only at practice and competitions, but in all aspects of our school and family lives. Balancing life as both an athlete and a student has taught me to become a very organized person, and has helped me foster a deep sense of dedication and commitment to whatever I set my mind upon.

Overall, cheerleading has been the foundation of my life, but most importantly, it has helped forge my love for sports medicine and physical therapy. With the help of "Vires, Artes, and Mores," I have been able to establish a strong head on my shoulders, and discover not only myself, but who I want to be. I am excited to finally be opening a new chapter in my life by carrying out my love of cheerleading and sports medicine each and every day with my potential career choice in physical therapy. The future can be a scary thought, but with the continual guidance of these virtues, I am confident every little thing will be alright.
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