Poetry / Monologue intro on a love poem - a girl leaving a guy because he treated her bad. [9]

oh - also can not may sound better if the two words were joined :-- cannot

Poetry / Monologue intro on a love poem - a girl leaving a guy because he treated her bad. [9]

You should consider removing the exclamation mark, which can sometimes seem a little elementary. The ending seems quite vague too, but overall an interesting, if not slightly short poem.