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Oct 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "grew up in two different societies" - How has your neighborhood shaped you?! [3]

Prompt: How has your neighborhood shaped you?

When I reminiscence back on my childhood, the diversity in my neighborhood and cultural family aspects seem the most prominent. Sitting here thinking about the past I can just imagine the array of diversity depicted in the neighborhood where I spent most my years. I also remember running around outside the house playing Holi, or getting dressed up in bright shades of yellow for Diwali with my siblings and cousins. I grew up in two different societies that add up to the sum of me.

Growing up in a culturally diverse neighborhood has shaped me to be a more accepting and knowledgeable individual. Diversity in my neighborhood ranged from different ethnic backgrounds, income levels, and family infrastructures. Down the street from me there were fellow Punjabi's, across the street there were Puerto Ricans, and right next door lived a Spanish family. Within my neighborhood there are low income apartments as well as newly renovated town homes. Some of my neighbors were single parents, divorced parents, or married couples. I was surrounded by peers whom excelled in academics, athletics, arts, and then were always a couple of them who fell under the negative influence. As I witnessed my peer's struggle to keep up with school because they had "family issues" at home; I became more appreciative of the life my parents have provided me. As I watched my confused peer's walk away from life into the shadows and give into drugs; my motivation for success grew increasingly. Sometimes when I think about it I'm glad that I wasn't born with a golden spoon because now I am more culturally aware and have also gained knowledge of "streets"; something that can't be taught through school. Despite the cultural awareness; growing up around my family I have learned to embrace my own Punjabi culture and the morals that come along with it.

I grew up in an extended family that lived no more than five minutes from me and I can truly say that has been one of the major influences that shaped the person I am today. While most of my peers were out playing hopscotch with the other neighborhood kids, I usually preferred to spend time with my cousins. I believe growing up in an extended Punjabi family has instilled a lot of values and morals in me and helped me to stay in touch with my roots. My family is very conservative, strict, and religious, but this has helped me prioritize what's important in life. The wisdom I gained from my family has taught me to be an honest person; because that's the only way I can be true to myself. By living a life of honesty, I am being true to the person I am, my beliefs and morality.
midnight   
Oct 27, 2010
Undergraduate / Blank Canvas - COMMON APP EXTRACURRICULAR ACTIVITY [11]

Leaves fall gently around me, rustling as they pile up into stunning collages of gold and red. They whisper a tearful goodbye in light melodies to summer and they flutter to the ground. Facing a small lake, I see the breeze make ripples on the water that rustle the reflections of the trees, making it seem like a mystical blend of another world. The scene draws me deeper and a heavy cloud of nostalgia engulfsword choice...takes over me? me. Nature knows that this exquisite beauty will soon be drained by the harsh winter. This is where music takes me in Chant d'automne (Autumn Song) by Tchaikovsky. Through ten years of piano, music has been a window to my every joy and motivation; it continues to teach me this form of harmony and takes me to undiscovered places. To me, music is a blank canvas; there are so many possibilities waiting to be painted.

make sure you read it out and make sure that your topics flow. Right now your jumping around alot. I like the anecdote in the beginning but you need to transitition into the main point of all this smoothly. Make you are concise.
midnight   
Oct 27, 2010
Writing Feedback / Is the Internet itself bad for students? [2]

First of all, I believe all of you here are quite familiar with the internet.that sounds really awkward what are you trying to say? Nowadays, the internet hasbecome a useful assistant to all of us, it helps us with a lot of things.What things? avoide words like things and stuff But some people believe that internet is a bad thing for students, but I completely disagree.

Nowadaysuse variation like in this generation,or in today's society , students have become addicted to the internet, they spend more and more time playing games, andsurfing the net. This automatically brings down their marks in school,but that's just one side of the story. Have you heard the other side of it? Internet actually helpsstudents a lot in their studies. Nowadays, students don't have to sit in the library all day searching through all the book when they can simply Google it or go to Wikipedia. They can get the information they need in just a few minutes. Thats not only help the student to study effectively but also help them save time for other things.this last sentence is really confusing

hope that helps some
midnight   
Oct 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "Post 9/11 backlash violence" Local/national concern admissions essay [8]

Prompt: Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you. (250-350 words)

September 11, 2001. Immersed in fear I watched the news quietly and I held back my tears. Not too far from where I lived existed an abstract reality where smoke filled the air and chaos screamed through the streets. America was attacked and fear struck society. Together America struggled, but America also became divided.

After this tragedy, there was an increase in hate crimes, caused simply by ignorance. People assume one person who looks like the Taliban represents a group of people and that group represents evil. Arab Americans, Muslim Americans, and Asian Americans became targets of backlash violence, but I never realized the magnitude of backlash violence until my community was affected.

Suddenly I was afraid of being an American Sikh; an innocent Sikh was murdered because "he wore a turban and Osama Bin Laden wears a turban." I was afraid for my brothers, father, mother, and peers whom also depict that same stereotypical image. People were taunted and harassed; walking down the street people yelled out "look at that terrorist" or "go back to your country." My psyche had completely changed, when I went out in public people glared at me with suspicion like I was less than human; we had become outsiders. Nine years have passed; society continues to hate and crime still exists.

People fall back on violence for emotional stability and mourn the dead with violence; but they must find other ways to get through the heartache. I myself attended poetry readings, awareness seminars and listened to people's compelling stories that brought tears to my eyes, but hearing these stories created this sense of strength letting me know that I was not alone. This experience has taught me to be a stronger person, and despite my instinct to; never over generalize or assume things. These situations made me aware and believe now, more than ever, that we truly are "one, created by the one creator of all creation. No enemy, no animosity. Love for one, love for all." - Guru Nanak, founder of the Sikh religion.
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