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Oct 30, 2010
Undergraduate / Ice cream essay too childish? Common App 150 Words on Work Experience. [9]
I don't think that any particular essay topic can be "too childish" because it is more or less how you write the essay that conveys if it is childish or not.
Try something more like this (114 words):
I thought that scooping ice cream would be easy, but my first week of work immediately proved otherwise. I clumsily tipped the mop bucket over, and spilled gallons of soapy water on the floor. I was embarrassed, but I didn't panic. To dry the floor, I skated around the shop floor with towels under my feet. The waiting customers were so amused by my mistake that they left me an extra large tip. My enthusiasm and antics kept customers smiling, even if they received a special "leaning tower of ice cream" cone. I ended that summer with a strong scooping arm, worn out sneakers, and knowing that when life got slippery, I would dance.
I don't think that any particular essay topic can be "too childish" because it is more or less how you write the essay that conveys if it is childish or not.
Try something more like this (114 words):
I thought that scooping ice cream would be easy, but my first week of work immediately proved otherwise. I clumsily tipped the mop bucket over, and spilled gallons of soapy water on the floor. I was embarrassed, but I didn't panic. To dry the floor, I skated around the shop floor with towels under my feet. The waiting customers were so amused by my mistake that they left me an extra large tip. My enthusiasm and antics kept customers smiling, even if they received a special "leaning tower of ice cream" cone. I ended that summer with a strong scooping arm, worn out sneakers, and knowing that when life got slippery, I would dance.