Posts by MonoColour

MonoColour

Nov 6, 2010

Undergraduate / My family is a Korean colony + Relay for Life - UC #1 and #2 feedback [4]

In the second essay, it jumps from "no answer as to why I was walking..." to "I found answer!"
I would make the transgression smoother. Did you perhaps meet a family that was supporting the Relay and did you connect it to yourself? What event happened to make you think that "I am walking for unfortunate victims of cancer" - the first portion before realization has a nice story feeling to it. Then the second portion is rather discontinued.

MonoColour

Nov 6, 2010

Essays / How to write an informal essay for a character interpretation? [4]

Consider how the character starts off in the beginning:
brilliant, but autistic. Single-parent raised, mother gone. He seems slightly unsure of himself (not regarding intellect.)
He goes on a journey to find his mother, solve the dog's death, his father's "infidelity" with the neighbour.
In the end, the main character concludes that he solved the mystery and he "could do anything".
It's up to you how you analyze it. What archetypal heroes go though - trial that changed the life of the hero (perhaps the dog's murder? or mother leaving?); realization of self (he is special? etc.) and so on.

MonoColour

Nov 6, 2010

Essays / Finding X - University of Chicago - Supplemental [4]

Hello, essayforum.

I'm applying to University of Chicago out of many. One of the supplements I am interested in is:
1) Find x. (inspired by Benjamin Nuzzo)

Finding "x" can be in the eye of the beholder, yes? Meaning, I can write whatever I wish to incorporate the finding of x.

Excuse me for this thread post...my dad is strongly arguing against me that it is incredibly difficult.

My idea is that x can be found everywhere, as x represents the duality of humanity (males, females, chromosomes before they pull apart after being copied.)

Is my path of thought completely off?

Also, what is a good word max limit for these essays? I'm assuming 750, but...

Thank you very much.