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fairgirl99   
Nov 14, 2010
Essays / An example of an epiphany [5]

Epiphany is discussion of awareness that changes your life or your view of the surrounding.

Here is an example of an epiphany of my English 5 teacher:
As a young man, I had the opportunity to join a Buddhist retreat in the wilderness of Death Valley in California. It was rigorous. We got up and began meditating well before dawn in the freezing cold and practiced silent mindfulness throughout the day's blazing heat, as we walked, ate, and worked together. At night we sat in meditation again for a couple of hours beneath the stars, finally going to our tents and crawling into our sleeping bags in the shivery cold again, sometimes with light snowfall dancing in the beams of our flashlights.

After many days of practice, my perception started to loosen, to shift from the habitual, and I became susceptible to teaching from the ancient land. The moment came one evening as primitive stone tool found on the desert floor made its round from hand to hand.

When it came to me I held it, feeling how it nestled familiarly in my palm, and the hand that had once carefully fashioned it upon the shore of a lake vanished long ago in geological time reached over the centuries to touch me.

With a sudden vertigo, I saw the constellations in the sky of my mind wheeling backward, beyond 1492 into the time depths of this continent. Suddenly wrenched free of the European time-line, I understood that my country, the United States of America, which my school textbooks had hammered into me was the most significant thing to ever happen to the Northern hemisphere, was a flash in the pan compared to the ancient cultures that inhabit it as their own.

That day, I believe I became the first of my ancestors to actually set foot in the New World, with the seed of an indigenous, native person planted within.

Later, I found a quote of the poet Gary Snyder's that described the nature of my epiphany: "For the non-Native American to become at home on this continent, he or she must be born again in this hemisphere, on this continent, properly called Turtle Island."

I believe that day I was born again. I got "indigenized," as a Native American friend calls it.

This is my own epiphany:

Six years ago, I was just a little girl who loved to enjoy the company of other kids who were born in Vietnam, and spoken the same language which I grew so familiar with. Until my parents surprised me one day when they told me, "we are going to America!" For a short moment, I thought it was a worse thing ever, because I was going to some country that I did not know of. But it was even worst when I found out my parents decided to leave me in America to stay with my aunt, whom I just met for the first time in thirteen years.

When I first entered school in America, I found school had become a challenge. The language was unfamiliar, and I could not understand most of the words spoken by the teachers nor the materials covered in classes. I kept on failing all of my classes which had never happened to me before when I was in Vietnam. I felt so ashamed as I looked at my first report card. I tried to convince myself the reason I fail was because I could not understand English. I soon realized that it was not because I could not understand English that had gotten me the bad grades, but it was me who did not want to try harder due to the sudden change of my surrounding environment.

As I kept on asking myself questions "how could my parents leave me here alone?" or "how come everything has become so difficult?" it came to my conscious that everything was not placed out for me to choose. Sometimes things could happen unexpectedly, and I should learn how to adapt to changing situations.

Soon, I decided to give my best effort to struggle with learning English, and tried to work twice as hard as other kids who already knew English better than me. Maybe changes were not as bad as I imagined. Often time, I looked back into my past and I always thanked my parents for leaving me in America. Maybe it would be better for me to live without my parents at a young age, because I could learn to be independent. Not only that, I even learned English faster than other kids in Vietnam, while it came with no cost.

Hope that will help :)
fairgirl99   
Nov 14, 2010
Undergraduate / "intended major is Psychology" - UC transfer personal statement [3]

Prompt: What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.

My intended major is Psychology. For me, Psychology is a very fascinating field where I get to know about the human mind, and how the brain functions as a control center of the whole body. Not only as it is fascinating, but being able to understand people can be very helpful for future career such as therapist or business. During my freshman year in high school, there was a period of time when depression was very overwhelming for me. I had to go through a therapy section, to learn about myself, and to gain my self- confidence back. It was a rough time for me, but it was also a starting point in where I began to find my own interest to pursuit in Psychology. I believed majoring in Psychology would be able to help me understand my own behavior, and to assist other people with their emotional and mental issue.

In 2005, I began to volunteer at Oakland Public Main Library Children Room. I was given many assignments to perform such as: laminating, organizing, and helping other people. The library was usually busy, and they did not have enough librarians to help with information and questions. As a volunteer, I had to help the librarians to assist people when needed, and that required good interacting skill. Before I volunteered at the library, I was a very shy kid, and rarely opened up to people. This was a big disadvantage in Psychology field, because Psychology required lot of interaction and observation. During the time I worked as a volunteer at the library, I had learned to interact with people effectively. Once in a while, there would be adults and children who were difficult to deal with, but I had to stay calm and polite while trying to solve their problems. These opportunities allowed me to learn how to stay calm while dealing with people in any situation.

To further my own experience, I participated in a few group counsels during my junior and senior year, so I could learn about therapy. There were many things that I learned during the time period when I was in group counseling such as: PTSD, OCD, stress, depression...etc. Each of the clients experience was unique and interesting to know. My favorite part during the section was learning how to release or cope with all these emotional issues. As I observed, when a client had successfully released himself/herself of the emotional and mental problem, the looks of delight on their face felt as if all the hard work had paid off. This made me realized that helping people to gain their self-confidence, and self-esteem all over again were something that I wanted to do. It made me feel happy and content, every time someone was able to find a purpose to live their lives again.

Situations can happen unexpected, and sometimes it was difficult to deal with emotional stress. However, it did not mean things would be impossible to do. Psychology would allow me to understand the human's mind, and to help people who could not control their emotion. For me to achieve this goal, I would hope for your consideration of accepting me and allow me to pursuit my major in Psychology.

Please let me know what you think about the essay, feedback is very important to me. Thank you!
fairgirl99   
Nov 14, 2010
Undergraduate / UC Transfer Essay - Econ Major, and Event that Shaped my life. [3]

The first prompt was kind of choppy in the beginning. You started out with so many "My dad" and it causes the disruption in the flow of the essay. I suggest you should talk more about your experience than giving out too much of "My dad"

The second prompt, it looks good. However, I would suggest that you should describe how your job would help you with your interest in computer science, be more specific and descriptive about it.
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