oceans123
Nov 26, 2010
Undergraduate / Grandpa's Pills- Why I Want to Be a Pharmacist -Common App Essay [3]
Nice essay. My favorite sentence is "'when' happened." It's pretty powerful.
This essay shows that you are compassionate, and I like that you undergo an obvious change over the course of the essay.
The last sentence seems like a bit of an exaggeration though; you never really express a feeling of "goal-lesness" or "perspective-lesness," if you know what I mean. Please excuse my made up words :-). Maybe you could change it around a bit. Hope that helps! Would you mind checking out my essay?
Cheers.
Nice essay. My favorite sentence is "'when' happened." It's pretty powerful.
This essay shows that you are compassionate, and I like that you undergo an obvious change over the course of the essay.
The last sentence seems like a bit of an exaggeration though; you never really express a feeling of "goal-lesness" or "perspective-lesness," if you know what I mean. Please excuse my made up words :-). Maybe you could change it around a bit. Hope that helps! Would you mind checking out my essay?
Cheers.
