Writing Feedback / Technology, the social life killer or saviour? [3]

Im new to this, but heres my Thesis for my essay:

Technology is part of all of our daily lives. No matter what you do, cook or go to the store we all use technology. This may seem like a good thing, but technology is having a negative impact on society. From phones to computers these things are destroying our social network and the face-to-face connection between people.

I will be posting my entire essay either today or tomorrow
thanks