Writing Feedback / People today are not as friendly as people were in the past. [4]

XUHAN
hello, XUHAN
i have read your writing, the topic is quite good, but the outline isnt clear, you should make the main topic concise such as: "... people seem friendlier now because of some reasons. first of all, ... secondly,... i think it'll be better. right! hihi.

you also have some grammar and spelling mistakes. i think you can see them if you read it again. and you use some words many times, you should you some similar meaning words...

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