Graduate / SOP for Ph.D. in Economics: "motivating and challenging" [4]


Thank you Martin since your advice helps me too.
Thanks a lot!

Graduate / "a desire to understand life differences" Personal Statement for Law School Admission [3]

Thank Kevin for the grammar tips cos' I learned from them.
Thx~

Graduate / "In the non-profit world..." - Writing an essay for a master's program [4]

【These projects sparked something new for me. I began to feel engaged, passionate, and immersed at work in a way that I had only achieved while pursuing personal interests.】

I want to know a specific point or example to demostrate the feelings you wentthrough, without specifics, it's a little vague. I cannot quite get your feelings.It's not touching, not convincing enough.

I personally think that it would be a lot better if you can write down some specifics and elaborate some personal experience during your working career, that lead you to the wish for getting out of the professional world to enter a graduate school. And the charicteristics you pointed out for the college is not unique and it seems to fit some other schools.

Have a nice day, and god bless you.
p.s.I'm from China, so there may be some grammar mistakes which you can ignore.^.^

Essays / Do you think self expression in high school will always have to be partially limited? [3]

For me, I think the self-expression in high school should not be confined to verbal expression, but also by means of your personal styles of behavior, dressing, communication patterns such as talking habits and so on.

Due to the school codes and other systemtic restrictions of any organition, you cannot fully follow your own ways of expression in the ways mentions above, sometimes, you may not even speak out your real thoughts, but in a whole, you are not restricted or limited, 'cos the real you cannot be concealed or refined to any outside rules, and in a period of time, people will always get to know you, even better than yourself do.

This is my opinion and hope this helps.
Due to the fact that English is not my native language, there may be some grammar mistakes that you can just ignore.

Have a nice day~~