Writing Feedback / The effects of using computer everyday on children [6]

Q: Using a computer every day has more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?
Any feedback would be appreciated, especially, feedback about the grammer
Answer:

With the improving of computer's performance, longer time is spent on this magic "box" by children every day. At the same time, brought by using these machines, the influence on those users has been given a rise of endless controversy in public. Some people support that the effects are more negative, while others stick to the opposite. I strongly approve of the former for some reasons. In this essay, I will discuss both these views and give arguments in my opinion.

It is undoubted that this hi-tech device has been changing the study and living style of these young groups. Only connecting a computer to the Internet, enormous educational materials could be easily downloaded, which facilitates to promote the student's achievements. In addition, more beneficial and various knowledge unavailable in school could be directly accessed, which makes it possible to extent the learner's views.

However, it is also true that this hi-tech device has been damaging the thinking and healthy of the same groups. Shortage of the effective and sufficient communication with other friends is generally induced because of the participants' heavily relying on the "virtual friends", which would make this generation less social and more isolated. Moreover, if spending long time on these sets, these children will have more opportunities to be invaded by indecent contents and violent scenes. So, comparing with the advantages described above, the disadvantages are more important and noticeable.

In conclusion, personally, if adults did not realize the lack of powerful self-control ability and correct judgment explained by these special groups, if adults ignored the necessary supervision to reasonably spending time on computer, the negative results, rather than the positive, would be likely to be shown on the growing youngsters.

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Writing Feedback / Mass media have been influencing our daily lives from various aspects [4]

Q: Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information.
comics
books
adio
television
film
theatre
State which you consider to be the most effective. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples for you own knowledge or experience.

Answer:
In modern age with the information explosion, mass media such as books, radio, television, films and theater have been influencing our daily lives from various aspects. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of the first three of them, and give the arguments about the one bringing the most effective in my opinion.

In general, reading books is the primary choice when we want to know something, especially, for students and the intelligent. The most complete, systematic and plentiful knowledge is likely to be contributed by piles of papers filled with living words, pictures and numbers. Moreover, it benefits to review the materials over and over for the readers. While, amounts of the products of wood comsume mountains of trees and need sufficient space to save them.

As one kind of wireless broadcasting system, radio presents the auditory information, which makes a lot of people could hear the fair sounds at the same time. Beautiful music, attractive stories and interesting news carried by the electric wave evolve our lives into be more cheerful. But it is very pitiful that when listening to the program, we only could image the scenes hapening

in the earphones.
Fortunately, the hi-tech devices capable of generating visual and auditory signals occupy the vacancy of our requirements for the colorful pictures, the living shows and the latest news. With the increasing popularity of television, the world seems to be smaller, the distance between remote areas seems to be decreased and the understanding of strange people seems to be promoted. Nevertheless, spending long time in front of the scream would be at a relative higher risk to damage our healthy and increase the possibilty to have an addiction for watching television.

In conclusion, personally, although there are varieties of advantages and disadvantages for the three communicating ways, I tend to consider that television gives the most effective to our lives. For example, for almost all the households with this magic device, the main amusement after supper is to enjoy the programs shown in that "box".