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Warlord   
Dec 28, 2010
Undergraduate / "perfect matches are hard to come by" - Why Vassar? [4]

Wow, that's a pretty solid essay. :)

It really brings across your passion for Vassar; however I feel that there is some repetition of ideas, that made your essay considerably longer than usual 'Why?' essays.

For example, delete "There was something in the air."

But all in all, I loved your essay.
Warlord   
Dec 27, 2010
Undergraduate / Students' Council - Common App Activity [4]

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).

A sacred silence dictated the dark, cold control room, from where the stage glowed like a distant lantern. I leaned closer to the glass that separated me from ecstatic audience, and spotted familiar faces hooting and whistling in excitement. Blissful. I signalled the audio-video crew members to prepare for the last segment of the show, and sneaked out with my walkie-talkie to join the euphoric crowd at the back of the auditorium. It was the finale of AJ Idol 2010, the biggest event organized by the Students' Council. A watery film screened my eyes, and my lips involuntarily curled into a smile as I embraced the fruit of three months of stress, panic, hard work and commitment. As the Overall In Charge (OIC) for this event, I had had a tough time delegating tasks, organizing and conducting meetings, approving 120-pages long proposal drafts and keeping everybody in the Council on schedule. There were differences to resolve, sponsors to win, and school authorities to convince. But looking at the overjoyed faces of my peers, I knew that it was worth it.

I am about 30 words/66 characters over the limit, and I can't think of how to trim it further. Would really appreciate all comments and suggestions.
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