joyjoy1321
Dec 29, 2010
Undergraduate / the Senior Capstone Program in Engineering, technical expertise - Why Olin? [8]
I have to say the 'Never heard of it' was not a problem for me. I graduated from Olin college and 'never heard of it' is what we expect from people. I like how you talk specifically about SCOPE and the Honor board and how you mention you want real-world experience. You could also mention something about Olin's project-based curriculum (How first years make toys in Design Nature for 4th graders and the 4th graders grade them) or how many Olin-Babson endeavors result in start ups but only if it strongly speaks to you. But I know you have a word limit and I think your essay is pretty good. I agree with the first poster who suggested a little bit more 'you' specifically. If there is a specific example of what you would bring to Olin...a club you want to start or a perspective or experience you uniquely can offer that would be a plus. But I think you did a good job of highlighting the engineering-entrepreneurship aspect which is very important to Olin.
I have to say the 'Never heard of it' was not a problem for me. I graduated from Olin college and 'never heard of it' is what we expect from people. I like how you talk specifically about SCOPE and the Honor board and how you mention you want real-world experience. You could also mention something about Olin's project-based curriculum (How first years make toys in Design Nature for 4th graders and the 4th graders grade them) or how many Olin-Babson endeavors result in start ups but only if it strongly speaks to you. But I know you have a word limit and I think your essay is pretty good. I agree with the first poster who suggested a little bit more 'you' specifically. If there is a specific example of what you would bring to Olin...a club you want to start or a perspective or experience you uniquely can offer that would be a plus. But I think you did a good job of highlighting the engineering-entrepreneurship aspect which is very important to Olin.
