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mtoad527   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "to prove myself to my team" - ND Supplement Feedback [7]

Alright. I'll post it and give feedback on yours too. Like I said before, mine is on the long side (195 words) and I am not happy with the ending...

It was my last chance to prove myself to my team, and I only had a few moments to make a decision. As soon as I had scrambled up the ladder, mounted the tight rope and relinquished my tight grip on the tree, I knew that my mind no longer had control over my body - as if the messages that my brain was rapidly dispatching to my hands, legs, arms and feet were being cut off before they could be processed. With sweaty hands, quivering legs, and tears in my eyes, I forced myself to continue taking steps until I reached the end. The tight rope walk was the last of a series of challenges in a Ropes Course that was part of the National Student Leadership Conference that I attended last summer. Up until this point, I had been reluctant to engage in any activity that required being even the smallest distance above the ground, on account of my severe fear of heights. Although the ten minutes on that rope were some of the scariest in my life, it was not regret that I felt ringing through my body upon finishing, but pride.

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mtoad527   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "to prove myself to my team" - ND Supplement Feedback [7]

Oh shoot. I literally just joined this site this morning, so you're probably correct about the PMing. My ND essay is too long, and despite its length I feel like it is missing something. I am just so frustrated with it. I'd be glad to give feedback on your ND essay. I just don't like the idea of posting it for all the world to see on this website...
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