Graduate / "volunteering at my daughter's Xgrade class" - help with Statement of Purpose? [5]

1.Where is the other part ?
2.Do not mention admission committee..
3.If you have not done some extra work you can fake it no one is coming there to check it...
4. ' vary ' is it various ...?
5.Tell them something more about your work in organized way..
6. At the end mention that you have the requisite talent and aptitude to match the programmes' demands.