Undergraduate / "I didn't choose Photography, Photography chose me"- F.I.T ESSAY [4]

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"I didn't choose Photography, Photography chose me"-Gerardo Suter. How does photography chose you?. Well photography chose me at the young age of eleven. A Fashion magazine came in the mail, just like any other curious child it sparked my interest. From the first page to the last I was in awe amazement at the photographs. In that moment the only thing that came to mind was "Where's mom's camera and how can I create these imagines of my own"