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Posts by NH Blush
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NH Blush   
Feb 3, 2011
Undergraduate / "Nursing = Good Health" - university of texas admission, statement of purpose [4]

There are a few mistakes that I noticed in your essay. What is the word-limit for this SOP? Because I find it really short, hardly 350 words. In addition, I feel if possible in addition to giving a lot of description about the nobleness of nursing career, you may devote some amount of space to personal experiences that has motivated you to take up a nursing career.

Nursing plays a large (I think critical/pivotal may sound better) role in the health-care industry. This profession demands the qualities of dedication and service-mindedness. The role of a nurse is not just restricted to that of a professional care-giver but involves performing all such activities that give comfort and relief to the patients, Nurses not only provide care and comfort; they give strength, motivation and the optimism patients need to get well. Everyone needs help, and appreciates an act of kindness once in a while. Through helping others I find my happiness and purpose. Becoming a nurse would enable me to have the knowledge and skills to act in times of emergency. The feeling of knowing that I have made someone smile is an unbeatable feeling. To be able to heal some (I guess you meant someone) or even save a life is an experience that is unspeakable. Being a person who can make a difference in someone's life is an unforgettable honor. I plan on becoming a nurse, a nurse who can change and save lives. I have found a purpose, and it is to care for those in need. I am determined to become a care provider. By becoming a nurse I will be able to provide others with the care and motivation they need to get well.This can be written in a more elegant manner, and also avoiding the points of care and motivation that you have already mentioned above.

The University of Texas is an excellent institution that provides its students with unlimited possibilities. The University of Texas offers the education, diversity and discipline I believe will enable me to become the nurse I plan to be. I believe that UT will broaden my horizons and give be the challenge I am looking for. I plan to join the Navy Nurse Corps after graduating with my bachelors of science in nursing. Attending UT will prepare me for the dynamic life that the Navy Nurse Corps offers. I will be able to not only help others but I can serve my nation. I believe that the University of Texas will ensure the solid higher education as well as the diverse environment that will help mold me into a Navy Nurse.

Good Luck.
NH Blush   
Feb 3, 2011
Letters / Cover letter for PhD in cancer. Confused if it looks like SOP? [4]

Below is a cover-letter that I have written for applying for a PhD studentship in cancer. The application packet requires only CV and cover-letter, I am confused how much information I should include in the cover-letter in such a case. In addition, they have not mentioned any word limit, it only says

"Applicants should submit a cover letter specifying their 1st and 2nd choice project, a CV and the names and e-mail addresses of two academic"

Please provide feed back as to the content and flow of the letter, and also whether my motivation to pursue research in Cancer at this institute is evident from the letter.

Thank you

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Dear Ms XYZ:

I am writing to apply for the PhD studentship in Cancer Studies through the *** Cancer Centre advertised on *** website. I have completed Master of Pharmacy specializing in pharmacology from **** University in August, 2010. Right now I am in the process of searching for a suitable doctoral program in the field of cellular and molecular biology. Having reviewed the studentship program, I believe I am a qualified candidate and would like to apply.

I received my undergraduate education in Pharmacy at **** College of Science, one of the best pharmacy colleges in India. During the penultimate year of my undergraduate course, I decided to specialize in pharmacology. Making a decision to pursue Masters immediately after undergraduate education was a tough one, mainly because of issues regarding funds for higher education. This is the reason I decided to appear for Graduate Aptitude Test in Engineering (GATE). Qualifying GATE with a percentile of 93.99 entitled me to receive scholarship from All-India Council of technical education (AICTE) to fund my post-graduation. During this course, I worked very hard, studying in detail both basic and clinical pharmacology, physiology and various techniques involved in pharmacological screening of drugs during the first year. I greatly enjoyed the long hours of animal experiments involving behavioral and biochemical studies in my project work.

Although my post-graduate dissertation work "Influence of **** Derivatives on Diabetic Neuropathy and Diabetic Nephropathy" focuses on diabetes, studying the pathophysiology and molecular mechanisms involved in the complications of diabetes and the mechanism by which novel drugs can counter them reinforced my interest in pursuing higher education in the area of cell signaling. And of all the diseases, it is the signaling in cancer cells that has attracted much attention of cellular and molecular biologists over the years. This I feel is because studies of cancer cells have also illuminated the mechanisms that regulate normal cell behavior. In fact, many of the proteins that play key roles in cell signaling were identified because their abnormalities led to the uncontrolled proliferation of cancer cells. The sound theoretical background that I gained in cellular and molecular pharmacology has given me significant insight into the molecular basis of disease and therapeutics; this in turn has motivated me to take a step further with regard to my research experience so far.

My participation in a post-graduate lecture update competition by giving a presentation on "Calorie restriction and cancer prevention: metabolic and molecular mechanisms" introduced me to the finer details of the link between cancer and metabolism. It is this background that attracted me to the PhD project "Metabolism in *** cancer progression" under Prof ***. After going through the details of the project, I understand that studies involving both in vitro and in vivo systems are involved. The experiments in pharmacology that I performed as a part of coursework and research have enabled me to gain sufficient skills in both these areas. Further, the scope of metabolomic studies in the project is another aspect that has captured my attention. This is because of my familiarity with metabolomics through work on a review article titled ""Metabolomics: Concept, Techniques and Pharmacological Relevance" that has now been accepted for publication in the *** Journal o under the *** section. My second choice project is "Activated STAT3, cell death and metastasis in **** cancer" under Professor ***. I am interested in this project as it involves detailed dissection of the cell signaling pathways involved in breast cancer so as to develop new pharmacological approaches for the treatment of cancers that involve high level of constitutive STAT3 activity.

Upon going through information about *** Cancer Centre, I understand that cancer research at the*** Cancer centre involves an extremely broad approach ranging from early molecular events in carcinogenesis to the rapidly evolving domain of translational research. Pursuing a PhD in such an interdisciplinary setting will be the most logical extension of my academic pursuits. In the long run, my career goals after completing PhD include joining a reputed university as a faculty member or a post-doctoral research fellow. To accomplish these goals, I look forward to undertaking research towards my doctoral degree in the unique international and multidisciplinary scientific environment at *** University.

I have enclosed my CV, list of preferred projects and e-mail addresses of my academic referees as per your instructions. Please inform me if I can provide additional information to aid you in the evaluation of my application.

Sincerely

Naila Haris
NH Blush   
Jan 15, 2011
Graduate / "Hard work pays off" - Health Care, General Personal Statement for MPH [3]

Dear Dinah

I would like to suggest the following correction in the following sentence:

Trying to figure out what to write to a group of extraordinary professionals to exude the type of person I am is one of the difficult tasks I have encountered in life.

Naila
NH Blush   
Jan 9, 2011
Graduate / Statememt of Purpose for IRB-Barcelona PhD fellowship [2]

Hello
Below is the SOP that I have written for PhD application at IRB. They did not mention any word-limit. This is my first attempt to write an SOP. Please provide valuable feedback and necessary corrections. Thank you.

The numbers of fields to choose from for research in pharmacology are enormous. I would like to pursue a research career in the field of diabetes. Diabetes is a major health-care problem that is riveting the attention of health-care professionals in many countries across the world. I take this opportunity to illustrate why I would like to pursue doctoral research in metabolic diseases at the Institute of Biomedical Research, Barcelona.

I have completed my post graduation degree- Master of Pharmacy specializing in pharmacology from *** University in August, 2010. During my high-school, my much-loved subject was chemistry, especially organic chemistry. It was this liking for the subject that led me to choose pharmacy as a course for my graduation. Since I was particular about which institution I pursued my higher studies, I chose *** college of Pharmaceutical Sciences which has been ranked amongst the top 5 pharmacy colleges in India. I qualified the Graduate Aptitude Test in Engineering (GATE) in the third year of my undergraduate course, which entitled me to receive scholarship from AICTE (All-India Council of Technical Education) for my post-graduate studies. My penchant for pharmaceutical organic chemistry and its overlaps into biology in drug discovery and development led me to pursue masters in pharmacy, specializing in pharmacology. During this course, I worked very hard, studying in detail both basic pharmacology and physiology and various techniques involved in pharmacological screening of drugs.

My first research project was the post-graduation dissertation work titled "Influence of XYZ Derivatives on Diabetic Neuropathy and Diabetic Nephropathy" which was carried out under the guidance of Dr. ***, Professor. The reason I chose this project was because I always wanted to carry out research in the field of metabolic diseases and I wanted something really innovative in my project. During the initial days of my project, I was really anxious as to what direction it would take, since this was the first time someone had taken up this kind of project in our department. Previous research work in our department comprised mainly on developing novel molecules for the treatment of diabetes as such and did not target the complications of diabetes. However, with continuous efforts on improvising and validating the methodology used for the experiments and some amount of technical advice from research scholars in other institutions, I managed to complete the project fairly well.

Though the hypothesized activity of the test drugs was not demonstrated in my project, in the end I was glad because I could successfully execute my ideas and methods. Not only this, the fact that my dissertation work scored the highest among all the others in the pharmacology department that year further boosted my morale. In addition to this studying the pathophysiology and molecular mechanisms involved in diabetes, aroused my interest in the biochemical basis of both the disease and its treatment. The sound theoretical background that I gained in cellular and molecular pharmacology under the guidance of Dr. **** during my Master's program has given me a significant insight into the molecular basis of disease and therapeutics, this in turn has motivated me to take a step further with regard to my research experience so far.

I would like to take up a PhD project that requires a detailed dissection of the molecular mechanisms involved in the pathogenesis of metabolic diseases. Though I have come across discussions involving molecular medicine in journal clubs and seminars, I have always been yearning for an opportunity to carry out this sort of research by myself under the guidance of renowned scientists and academicians, I feel confident that if selected for a research project involving techniques in cellular and molecular biology, I will be able to master them with perfection, keeping in mind that I always willing to put in hard-work and am determined to deliver the best I can to anything I do.

This year I find myself in that difficult and frustrating transitional period between graduate and doctoral studies. Though I would have preferred to directly continue PhD after graduation, I opted to take some time off. A few months away from school, I reasoned, would afford me the time needed to recuperate from an exhaustive post-graduate education, gain some perspective. And, finally, this l has given me sufficient time to search and research for graduate programs that best suit my needs.

This is when I came across the "la Caixa"/IRB Barcelona International PhD Programme advertised on Nature.com. Upon going through the research activities at IRB, I found that the institution has an excellent record in research in the field of diabetes. The research programs that greatly interest me are those in Molecular Medicine. Upon going through the research activities and publications that were carried out under Dr.Joan J. Guinovart and Dr.Antonio Zorzano, I find that their works correspond to my area of research interests. Further I feel that the multidisciplinary approach involving a combination of several techniques, ranging from basic molecular biology and cell biology procedures to experiments in-vivo adopted at their laboratories at IRB will enlarge my expertise and vision to fulfill my career goals.

In the long run, my career goals after completing PhD include joining a reputed University as a faculty member or researcher either in my home country India or abroad. Though I have spent my childhood in Saudi Arabia and college years in India, I have also been fascinated by Europe, both in terms of research and the place as such. I came across University of Barcelona in Spain, while I was reading the book "Advice for the Young Investigator" by Santiago Ramon y Cajal which I found highly inspiring. I have also learnt French during my college days, thinking that I may require it in the future during my graduate studies. I could learn it with ease and understood that it is possible to gain good command over a foreign language with determination. After getting detailed information from IRB website, I have taken the decision to apply for this PhD programme. I believe that IRB is the right place for my growth both on an academic and personal level.

Naila Haris
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