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Jan 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS-Money spent on different forms of entertainment (WT1) [8]
The compound bar chart indicates changes in the amount of money expended on various types of entertainment from 1995 to 2000 in three regions.
The entertainment markets in all three regions were on an upward trend from 1995 to 2000.United States dominated according to the amount of money spent on the entertainment throughout the period in comparison to Europe and Asia. The entertainment industry acquired $184 billion from US in 1995 and $257 billion in 2000. Publishing was the most preferable form of entertainment in US and Europe,closely followed by television sector. In 1995, consumers spent a total of more than $150 billion on publishing and the expenditure rose to about $250 bl by 2000. The changes in the figures of expenditure on television were most significant in United States as the amount doubled from $50 billion to $100 billion over five years. Cinema, video and music had little or no significant change in the amount of money squandered into them.
Overall, the entertainment markets in Asia, Europe and United States were on a rising trend from 1995 to 2000.
Devote similar attention to each category on the graph. Try to generalize description of time/period. Work on using prepositions.
The compound bar chart indicates changes in the amount of money expended on various types of entertainment from 1995 to 2000 in three regions.
The entertainment markets in all three regions were on an upward trend from 1995 to 2000.United States dominated according to the amount of money spent on the entertainment throughout the period in comparison to Europe and Asia. The entertainment industry acquired $184 billion from US in 1995 and $257 billion in 2000. Publishing was the most preferable form of entertainment in US and Europe,closely followed by television sector. In 1995, consumers spent a total of more than $150 billion on publishing and the expenditure rose to about $250 bl by 2000. The changes in the figures of expenditure on television were most significant in United States as the amount doubled from $50 billion to $100 billion over five years. Cinema, video and music had little or no significant change in the amount of money squandered into them.
Overall, the entertainment markets in Asia, Europe and United States were on a rising trend from 1995 to 2000.
Devote similar attention to each category on the graph. Try to generalize description of time/period. Work on using prepositions.
