Posts by 8jhoi8

8jhoi8

Feb 2, 2011

Writing Feedback / "Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay [8]

hi Kathy

Thanks you so much for your time ! i like the way you revised my essay!
i passed my rough draft today and i recieved a lot of grammatical issues.
i really need some help because i having some difficuties in my english.
and my final due is on friday.
thanks.

please comeback soon...:-)

8jhoi8

Feb 2, 2011

Writing Feedback / "Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay [8]

Thanks for your advice
very much appreciated :-)

8jhoi8

Feb 1, 2011

Writing Feedback / "Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay [8]

can anyone help to improve my essay its my first time doing this so i need some suggestion! very much appreciated :)

8jhoi8

Feb 1, 2011

Writing Feedback / "Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay [8]

Moving into the Land of Dream

It was Saturday a family day. I wake up by the morning light with the thick coffee aroma filling into the room. I wake up with a yawn but still laying down because of my laziness. I can feel the tender sun wrapping me around giving me warmth. I then stood up nearly tumbling from the lost of balance and went down the stairs. There I saw my husband drinking coffee, and reading the newspaper at the same time. My Son Christian was as usual watching T.V while eating his cookie. I on the other hand went outside to get some fresh air. [...]