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Essay topic: issue essays-The school board at High School Z is considering raising the number of years of required physical education classes. The board will be voting on a proposal to raise the number of years students need to take physical education from one year to three years. Do you think the school board should increase the physical education requirement to three years? Support your opinion with specific examples.

The issue of increasing the number of years of required physical education classes in high school is a controversial one. Some prefers the idea of increasing the number of years of physical education because it enhances students' overal performance in school. Others oppose it because it is wasting time and suits only for athletic students. After careful thoughts, I believe that the board should increase the physical education requirments because it strenghtens students' physical body and also builds their competition and cooperation level, which enhances students' performance in school as well as in the society.

High School students are in a stage where they need to build a character and physical education can help them to build such important characters. Spending more time on physical activities with friends and classmates build up a stronger relationship and friendships. It also helps them to be competitive in a good way because there is cooperation skill built in between each other.

Second, increasing the number of the physical education from one to three hours is a good amount for students to spend. through this class, students can relax from other subjects such as math, English, and social studies. it builds up motivation and helps them to concentrate more on other subject by exericise. Humans need to take a break and need to move around because many people are kinesthetic. Indeed, students tends to remember things by using their bodies. If they are forced to study and not being able to do any physical activities, they will be lost their concentration easily.