Scholarship / "to contribute to such active learner environment" - Singapore and USA [4]

Hello. I am a new member. Hope to your help.!!!
I am applying for scholarship in Singapore and the USA. Could you check my application essay??

The topic: Tell us how will you contribute to our community,which is a vibrant school with active learners and a lot of exciting activities.

My essay:

I was once an introvert but my exposure to the outside world led me to break out of my shell. One experience after another helped me improve into being the outgoing student I am today. Growing up in the capital city of Vietnam and attending one of the most diverse schools in Hanoi as well as being national champion in Chinese chess, I think I can contribute several things to the community.

First, I think the desire to success academically will be my first priority to contribute to such active learner environment. I attain second place in Math competition at my school so Math will be my first subject to focus on. My eager to learn and improve my knowledge will also lead me to accomplish good mark in other courses. In order to do so I will spend more time to study at home as well as concentrate at classes. Thus, I can contribute my passion and motivation in pursuing academic excellence as a part of active learning community.

Second, as national champion in Chinese chess in my country, I believe my experience will be useful to help student who like to participate in the activity. I have participated 7 times in national competition in Chinese chess and attain first place 4 times. With many years experience I figure out that Chinese chess is really helpful for conceptual skills which is highlight recommend for student as one of the activity to develop their mental capacity. It also brings fun for the people who play it meanwhile relaxing after hard time studying. So I think I can contribute my knowledge to develop this non-sporting activity to enrich the high quality of activities at Sji-international school.

My commitment to community and volunteer services is also another thing that I can bring to the community. While working hard at the national Chinese club and excelling in academic achievement, I still find time to volunteer with numerous organizations. Volunteer to distribute goods to homeless people in the town near Hanoi and help packaging presents to children in SOS village were unforgettable memories for me. My volunteer experiences have positively influenced my life and made me a well-rounded person. I am planning to keep volunteering while attending Sji-school and it will make my college experience diverse and valuable.

In conclusion, as ambitious girl with eager to get an excellence result from studying as well as having unique skill in chess and having a heart for volunteer activity I believe that I can contribute and enrich the lives of Sji-international school and make the school proud of having me as a student.