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Mar 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Parents are first" - narrative essay [12]

asmafiqi
When I was a child I had many dreams
That had many meaning to my life
I had no one to help me accomplish all those dreams
But I had confidence in me that kept me going
I had no money and no courage to finish them
But I had God on my side that had showed which way to turn => i had god that had showed which way to turn in mu side.

I had determination and motivation that have got me this far
I had no regrets and no pain what so ever
=> you said you had confidence but then no courage?????
little sun   
Mar 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Parents are first" - narrative essay [12]

EF_Kevin
hi...EF_Kevin!!!
could you help me with something replaces for this sentence "But now, I'm in university and I'm in literary section which I'm curious to know because of my eighteen-year obedience"?

i mean: i am always obedient for 18 years so i am worth to have one time to make decision by myself at least.
little sun   
Mar 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Parents are first" - narrative essay [12]

Parents are first
In our life, we through many trials without them we can't mature. And I had an experience of hardship when I was fifteen years old. I had to choice a main field to concern in high school: science section or literary section. It was really hard time because this decision would affect my whole life and make up me in future.

I still remember it was a sunny day but there were something awful in my mind. The last day for decision was coming, my parents was invited to parents meeting which was hold in my secondary school to give the final answer for a very important problem. A cross-road appeared in front of me, which one I should choose to continue my academic future. In real, I thought I like some thing in art and literature. I used to be attracted by novels and short stories for a long time. I was also into painting for a short time later. May be literary section apposite to me, I thought. In contrast, my parents thought science is what I needed. In their belief students in science section are always intelligent and excellent. In addition, my brother was real evidence and I had to follow him certainly. If I studied in science section, my major in university or college would be in the same section in ninety percents. On my side, I had not the intention of scientific field. I believe literary section is the field where my creative could work in freedom atmosphere. But denying parents' proposal was an absent-minded and extremely terrible action for a fifteen-year obedient daughter. What a dilemmatic situation!

After all, I decided to enroll in scientific section to please my parents. I couldn't be accustomed to against parents that I haven't done ever before. Thanks for obedient decision my years in high school passed peacefully. But now, I'm in university and I'm in literary section which I'm curious to know because of my eighteen-year obedience. Somewhere in my mind, I am satisfied with my life motto: pleasing parents first and I will have what I want.
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