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Mar 17, 2011
Essays / Technology creates problems for humans and is not good for everything and everyone. [6]

1-an introduction paragraph which ends with the thesis statement;
2-a body paragraph which includes a detailed description or explanation of your example/s; and
3-a conclusion paragraph which derives a 'moral' or a lesson from your argument.
4-Write an exemplification essay.
5-Your goal is to provide thee representatkve extended examples to be true.

Introductory hook: Technology is good for everything and everyone.

Thesis statement: brief list of three examples in parallel form
Thesis: Technology is not creates problems for humans because of Airplanes, mobiles and computers.

Topic sentence for paragraph 1: Airplanes is the most sefty transport.
Supporting Details and reasons in bullet point form.
-Airplanes care for everyone's luggage to do not lose them.
-Airplanes always is flying by route to avoid any crash with other aircrafts.

Tpoic sentence for paragraph 2: Mobiles is connecting people and helps to keep in tuch.
Details and reasons:
-by mobiles people can call to the hospital or to the police in a critical situations.
-by mobiles people can call to close people while for miles away form them.

Topic sentance for paragraph: 3 Computers are the most important technology in nowadays computers help for everything.
Detils and reasons:
-to construct a building architectures need a computer.
-To know any information that people does not know they a computer with board band conection.

First of all, airplanes always caring about people life. Thus in airport and in airplane safety is always comes first. Nowadays too many people likes to fly on airplanes, because comfortable and everything alrady organized by dispatcher, staff, airman and so on. They consider all the main points to avoid any catastrophe, that could be happend. Differences from a car an airplanes fly in the sky by the free route, where airplanes fly without risk.

could someone check my essay and give me some advice how to write this essay? In advance very grateful =*)
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