Writing Feedback / Success in life comes with 1% of Brilliance & Luck and rest of the 99% is hard work. [5]

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"When people succeed in life, it is because of hard work. Being lucky has nothing to do with success in life." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Essay:

there is no alternative of hard work to achieve success in life

There is a say "Brilliance and Luck is God gifted, which is only 1% of success, rest of the 99% of the success, comes from hard work". Success in life comes majorly from hard work, resilience and commitment. There is no use of having brilliance, if that person does not use his brilliance with hard work to achieve his goal.

There are huge numbers of examples to prove that hard work is the path to success and I will take one very well-known example of Abraham Lincoln. We all know that he was one of the greatest President of United States. But he achieved in life purely with his hard work, determination and resilience. He lost his wife, had loss in business, had a nervous breakdown, lost three time in Presidential election but he still did not give up and worked hard. Finally he became 16th President of United States on 1861 and stayed as President of United States unit his assassination on 1865.

Coming to the present day, we can give a very good example of success from hard work is 44th US President Mr. Barack Obama. We all know that he is the first African American President in US and he achieved it only by hard work. He is a native of Hawaii and with mare hard work he completed his Law degree from two most reputed Universities of the World (Columbia University & Harvard University). He elected as Senator of Illinois three time and later he got elected as President of US on 2009 and he achieved all just by mare hard work.

Let us see if there are any examples of success from hard work, available in line of sports. Let us talk about a very famous football player name Pele. Well this is definitely not his actual name; rather this was his nick name. We and every football player of the world accepted him as the best football player of the world and we know that he became the best player not by luck but by his hard-work. He used to practice football every-day. His coach used to hang rings from the goal post and asked him to pass the ball through these rings. With lots of practice and hard work, he sharpened his football kicking accuracy so much that, he could pass the Ball through the ring even without looking its position. This helped him to score more than thousand goals in the football world and fetch FIFA Cup three times.

So with the above examples we can conclude that there is no alternative of hard work to achieve success in life. But there are some examples which contradict to this. Let us take an arbitrary example of a person who won the lottery. Well definitely there is hard work to this case and by sheer luck, success can come to person. Let us take one more example of a person winning "Jackpot" in casino. This is also a good example of winning success just by luck. But this does not mean he can maintain this success in life for long unless hard work is done to maintain this success.

So as I mentioned at the beginning, "Success in Life comes with 1% of Brilliance & Luck and rest of the 99% is just mare hard work", is well concluded from the above examples.

Writing Feedback / "Parents = best teachers; we Human's are also bound by the same Law of Nature" -TOEFL [2]

Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay: "When any Animal open their eyes in this World, whatever they see first time, they take them as their Parents & they start imitating them. This is the Basic definition of Imprinting". Like every other Animal, we Human's are also bound by the same Law of Nature, "We Learn & Imitate from our Parents".

So in my opinion, parents are the best teacher for any child. There are some more than enough reasons & examples to support this argument. First and foremost thing is that, Parents, especially Mother carry their child for Nine Months in their Womb & they give birth to her child, feed them, Nurture them, Protect them from any harm from the nature. So as per that, she will know more about her child than anyone else especially about her child's strong points & weak points. As per that, she can teach how to improve her child's weakness & guide them to flourish from their strong points. So as per that definitely we can tell that Parents are the Best Teacher for their child.

Furthermore we can tell that Kids learn their language from Parents, like their first word, once they start talking, learn daily conversation & way of expressing their feelings etc... So as per that point of view parents are the best teacher for their kids. Even they try to learn & imitate their parent's behavior & attitude, behavior to other people etc... So that Point of view Parents are the teacher for their child. Last but not the least, the relationship & love toward child for their Parents are without any self interest & as per that Parents will do, guide & tell their child without any benefit for their own. Any other teaching from other's like School Teacher, Baseball or Football Coach will have interest of their own, but parents will not. So as per that child's best guide & teacher is parent.

Unfortunately we are living in real world & we are human. Even all the above points are true, but there are some exceptions. First negative point for parents being teacher is that, as kids will take good things from parents & so the Bad things like Smoking, Drinking, Harsh behavior to others, slangs & bad Languages etc... Kids will pick up, imitate these Bad things much faster from parents than any other person. Second point is that, all the career decision taken by the parents for their kids may not be correct. Sometime Parents try to impose their dreams & desire on the kids without even knowing that their kids want. This can cause dissatisfaction to their child & later children can become rebellious against their parents. But in this case we can directly blame parents also, as they are living in a very competitive world & to flourish, they sometime do not get time to sit down & try to understand their children's desire. Also sometime parents try to enforce some of their decision or career path as they think that, that career path will help their children in growth in future irrespective of knowing their children's desire for that decision of career growth.

So overall there are lots of good reasons for Parents being best teacher as well as there are some arguments for being them to be bad or sometime worse teacher of all. But overall I will still say that Parents are the best teacher for their child. Like the wise man say "Nurturing of children, starts from Home".