LAL2011
Apr 5, 2011
Undergraduate / "the dynamic learning environment and cultural diversity" - Transfer Application [3]
Hi everyone
I am currently in the process of transferring to a four year college and I need some help with my personal statement. I am not the best at writing and I feel that my grammar is horrible so any help would be appreciated.
The personal statement is a critical element in the review of your application and will be used to assess your fit within the degree program and the University. Your personal statement should:
During my final year at Bellevue College, I took some difficult classes and ended up getting A's and B's. My confidence is at an all time high and I was in good spirits. However, I did not have a good start to my college career. I had a severe social anxiety disorder that made me afraid to go class. As a result, I ended up going through a cycle of withdrawing from classes and received a few F's for not withdrawing from class in time.
At this point, I was at a fork in the road and I had a huge decision to make. Do I continue down this path of failure? Or do I just settle on finding a job and work a blue collar job for the rest of my life? I chose the latter. I ended up working long, excruciating hours as a machine operator and made a good amount of money. I also overcame my social anxiety because I was surrounded by many friendly people from different cultures. Eventually, my bank account grew larger and larger by the week and I made many friends, but I felt that something was lacking. I was not happy with my job and ended up going through a period of depression. The only element that brought me light through this dark period of time was building my new gaming machine. Holding each shiny new component and putting them together piece by piece brought me solace.
When I would have family and friends over, they would take notice of my work. I received many compliments on how fast and efficient my computer was. Receiving all these compliments brought a huge smile to my face. Soon after, people were asking me for help to build their computers and set up their home networks. I offered my services at no cost. That is how much I enjoy working on computers.
I thought to myself, if I enjoy working on computers and setting up networks for free, why not do this for a living? This is when I decided that I want to become an IT professional.
After hours and hours of searching for a program that will help me to achieve my goals, I found a perfect match. I feel that the dynamic learning environment and cultural diversity offered by the University of Washington will help me to achieve my goals. Your prestigious program will put me at the forefront of breaking trends and new technology. Courses in networking and databases, coupled with my A+ certification will build a solid foundation for my career as an IT professional. The research opportunities, internships, and senior project will also help me to develop teamwork skills which is crucial in the world of Information Technology. Being able to work with people who have a similar passion for IT as I do will cultivate friendships and build upon my leadership skills.
Thank you Jessica and Kevin for your help!
Hi everyone
I am currently in the process of transferring to a four year college and I need some help with my personal statement. I am not the best at writing and I feel that my grammar is horrible so any help would be appreciated.
The personal statement is a critical element in the review of your application and will be used to assess your fit within the degree program and the University. Your personal statement should:
During my final year at Bellevue College, I took some difficult classes and ended up getting A's and B's. My confidence is at an all time high and I was in good spirits. However, I did not have a good start to my college career. I had a severe social anxiety disorder that made me afraid to go class. As a result, I ended up going through a cycle of withdrawing from classes and received a few F's for not withdrawing from class in time.
At this point, I was at a fork in the road and I had a huge decision to make. Do I continue down this path of failure? Or do I just settle on finding a job and work a blue collar job for the rest of my life? I chose the latter. I ended up working long, excruciating hours as a machine operator and made a good amount of money. I also overcame my social anxiety because I was surrounded by many friendly people from different cultures. Eventually, my bank account grew larger and larger by the week and I made many friends, but I felt that something was lacking. I was not happy with my job and ended up going through a period of depression. The only element that brought me light through this dark period of time was building my new gaming machine. Holding each shiny new component and putting them together piece by piece brought me solace.
When I would have family and friends over, they would take notice of my work. I received many compliments on how fast and efficient my computer was. Receiving all these compliments brought a huge smile to my face. Soon after, people were asking me for help to build their computers and set up their home networks. I offered my services at no cost. That is how much I enjoy working on computers.
I thought to myself, if I enjoy working on computers and setting up networks for free, why not do this for a living? This is when I decided that I want to become an IT professional.
After hours and hours of searching for a program that will help me to achieve my goals, I found a perfect match. I feel that the dynamic learning environment and cultural diversity offered by the University of Washington will help me to achieve my goals. Your prestigious program will put me at the forefront of breaking trends and new technology. Courses in networking and databases, coupled with my A+ certification will build a solid foundation for my career as an IT professional. The research opportunities, internships, and senior project will also help me to develop teamwork skills which is crucial in the world of Information Technology. Being able to work with people who have a similar passion for IT as I do will cultivate friendships and build upon my leadership skills.
Thank you Jessica and Kevin for your help!
