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Posts by lol_joyce
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lol_joyce   
Apr 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / The world is like a painting, our existence the penciled outlines and our lives.. [8]

I really like your ideas! Your ideas are very deep and different from others, which makes your essay stand out. I just have a question... aren't essays supposed to be witten in third person? Also, I wouldn't ask this much questions in an essay, because it makes it seem weird. Instead of just askingquestions, I would put it like "It is a wonder that...." or "makes people wonder..." etc...

I might be wrong...I am only in Gr. 9 so I don't hav much experience.
lol_joyce   
Apr 20, 2011
Undergraduate / find X- university of Chicago (perfection) [4]

Thank you everyone for replying... I have a long way to go... and I only have 4 years before I have to apply univrsity T T

I need to iprove my essay writing skills!
lol_joyce   
Apr 17, 2011
Undergraduate / find X- university of Chicago (perfection) [4]

I have only written half of the the intro and two body paragraphs, and I need another paragragh... but i am really stuck... someone please help me... ><

X often represents mistakes, faults, and wrongs. In other words, X is a symbol of imperfection. If chasing perfection is the ultimate goal of life, then imperfection gives humans direction and reasons to live. Also, it is the strongest motivation for people to think and work hard, which keeps them from becoming ignorant, content sheep. X, representing imperfection, is everywhere and will always be everywhere.

People spend their whole lives making improvements to get closer to perfection; seeking perfection is the main purpose of most people's lives. People work hard during most of the times in their lives, and they always have something that they are trying to accomplish. Once they have achieved that, they can enjoy a short period of happiness before they find another goal to chase after. For example, a baby spends his first couple months of life trying to walk. After all the tripping, he has finally learnt to walk, he walks around for a while feeling very proud of himself. However, it won't be long before he starts thinking "If only I could run..." Individuals unconsciously repeat this process over and over again in their lives, which is what makes life interesting and meaningful.

Imperfection also forces people to think hard in order to make improvements, and in fact, humans will be brain-dead if the world they live in is free from any flaws and wrongs. Since people can think on their own, they often find faults in the situations they are in. The thoughts of wanting better lives motivate them to use their brains and think deeply. As they think about what they can do to seek perfection efficiently, they become more and more creative, thoughtful, and have more personality. Individuals become unique, one of a kind, and different from others, which makes human beings even more special. On the other hand, if humans live in a perfect world with nothing to change and work hard for, all they have to do every day is eat and sleep, and eventually, human beings will become sheep and pigs
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