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Oct 9, 2008
Writing Feedback / The biggest change in my life - Narrative introduction help [5]
After some revisions its here... Any suggestions now?
When I moved from Wisconsin to Illinois, my life changed in ways that I could not predict. I learned a lot of things, what financial security means, how to budget money, and that I absolutely hate moving. I changed the way I looked at life altogether. The biggest change was going from my lazy, do nothing lifestyle which I enjoyed so much, to working and going to college. We moved because we had no choice, the house had been foreclosed on.
After some revisions its here... Any suggestions now?
When I moved from Wisconsin to Illinois, my life changed in ways that I could not predict. I learned a lot of things, what financial security means, how to budget money, and that I absolutely hate moving. I changed the way I looked at life altogether. The biggest change was going from my lazy, do nothing lifestyle which I enjoyed so much, to working and going to college. We moved because we had no choice, the house had been foreclosed on.