jamesyl
May 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / Actions speak louder than words. TOEFL ibt writing [4]
Well, first of all. I don't think it a good idea to say women are more usually "talkative" than men. BTW, you can use the word "voluble" instead of "talkative", which refers to talking a lot.
"when come up with a robber or an murder , does persuasion..."
When you come across a robber...
"we have act in time to get a meaningful action."
We should sometimes act immediately when bad things happen
I think you did a great job in this essay, with slight traces of mistakes. You have a good control of English phrases, and you get your points across clearly. To score higher in the real TOEFL test, you may probably add 1 or 2 more supporting ideas. Good luck to your test! :D
Well, first of all. I don't think it a good idea to say women are more usually "talkative" than men. BTW, you can use the word "voluble" instead of "talkative", which refers to talking a lot.
"when come up with a robber or an murder , does persuasion..."
When you come across a robber...
"we have act in time to get a meaningful action."
We should sometimes act immediately when bad things happen
I think you did a great job in this essay, with slight traces of mistakes. You have a good control of English phrases, and you get your points across clearly. To score higher in the real TOEFL test, you may probably add 1 or 2 more supporting ideas. Good luck to your test! :D