kimaya
Oct 16, 2008
Writing Feedback / What experiences have led you to select your professional field? [2]
Hi,I am applying to Boston University for the Electrical engineeering course and this is the essay I wish to post.
Please give me a feedback of the essay and suggest a good end to it.
Thanks
-Kimaya
"Zip, zap, zoom" went my car through dozen others on the race course and touched the finish line way before any other. Hurrah! I had done it! I had won the fifth consecutive game of the series and would be adding one more trophy to my kitty. During the award ceremony, I pompously walked to the dais to receive my due. To my dismay, just when the chief guest was about to hand over the prize to me, the television screen went blank.
Why does my play station give away every time I am about to lift the golden cup high up in the air? When the engineer from the nearby electronics centre dropped in to look up on it, I curiously observed the fascinating array of capacitors resistors as he worked on it. This was my first date with circuits and it was love at first sight.
In the sixth grade, I was fortunate enough to work with electrical gadgets at "The Young Scientist" workshop that I had attended. All the participants were provided with electronic kits that comprised of a small integrated circuit board, wires, a small magnetic device, which we were informed was a mini microphone, a woofer and a battery. The instructor explained the network to us and we set about soldering the wires into the right places and soon came to life the microphone and the woofer attached to it. I was elated at having created my own sound system, although, all I had done was to assemble it.
As I grew older, I was exposed to larger doses of electronics and every bit of information was devoured greedily by me. Currently, in my twelfth grade, my physics laboratory work comprises of experiments based on Ohm's Law, electric potentials of various kinds of cells, conversion of ammeters into galvanometers, to name a few. Dealing with potentiometers, rheostats, resistance boxes and the likes, and conducting theoretical study of logic gates, analog and digital signals, semi-conductors, Kirchoff's Laws and much more has just deepened my intrigue and strengthened my desire to venture into the amazing world of electronics.
Hi,I am applying to Boston University for the Electrical engineeering course and this is the essay I wish to post.
Please give me a feedback of the essay and suggest a good end to it.
Thanks
-Kimaya
"Zip, zap, zoom" went my car through dozen others on the race course and touched the finish line way before any other. Hurrah! I had done it! I had won the fifth consecutive game of the series and would be adding one more trophy to my kitty. During the award ceremony, I pompously walked to the dais to receive my due. To my dismay, just when the chief guest was about to hand over the prize to me, the television screen went blank.
Why does my play station give away every time I am about to lift the golden cup high up in the air? When the engineer from the nearby electronics centre dropped in to look up on it, I curiously observed the fascinating array of capacitors resistors as he worked on it. This was my first date with circuits and it was love at first sight.
In the sixth grade, I was fortunate enough to work with electrical gadgets at "The Young Scientist" workshop that I had attended. All the participants were provided with electronic kits that comprised of a small integrated circuit board, wires, a small magnetic device, which we were informed was a mini microphone, a woofer and a battery. The instructor explained the network to us and we set about soldering the wires into the right places and soon came to life the microphone and the woofer attached to it. I was elated at having created my own sound system, although, all I had done was to assemble it.
As I grew older, I was exposed to larger doses of electronics and every bit of information was devoured greedily by me. Currently, in my twelfth grade, my physics laboratory work comprises of experiments based on Ohm's Law, electric potentials of various kinds of cells, conversion of ammeters into galvanometers, to name a few. Dealing with potentiometers, rheostats, resistance boxes and the likes, and conducting theoretical study of logic gates, analog and digital signals, semi-conductors, Kirchoff's Laws and much more has just deepened my intrigue and strengthened my desire to venture into the amazing world of electronics.
