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May 3, 2011
Poetry / [teenage] wasteland and nihilism - feedback [3]

teenage wasteland

you've been here before
this place with a lure
like a cheshire cat grin
here in this place where
abstract nouns are
suddenly tangible
and a steady beat
shakes your bones

a puff of smoke

gone again.

nihilism

nihilsm, you said,
you know,
everybody dies, no point
etc. etc.
and you waved your hand around in a
'blazé' (it's french, you said) fashion.
i was just about to say
something equally
acerbic and erudite
but then
the sun came up and
everything was beautiful and
i forgot

i'd like some feedback on these poems. i'm deciding which one to include in my school writing folio.
thanks :)
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