scoffey92
Nov 15, 2008
Undergraduate / How I help everyday people - UCF Essay 2! [3]
Thank you for this additional help!
Summer
Thank you for this additional help!
Summer
scoffey92
Nov 15, 2008
Undergraduate / the hardest thing in this world is to live in it - Evaluate my UCF Essay [3]
Thank you evalutating my essay! The corrections really helped me. Unfortunately, I couldn't add to it with more detail; there is a word limit that I was very close to.
Thank you again!
Summer
Thank you evalutating my essay! The corrections really helped me. Unfortunately, I couldn't add to it with more detail; there is a word limit that I was very close to.
Thank you again!
Summer
scoffey92
Oct 31, 2008
Undergraduate / How I help everyday people - UCF Essay 2! [3]
I know it needs something added at the beginning, along with any other issues. Any help or suggestions?
As a students, we read about all of these different epic heroes and heroines who save the heavens and Earth, using their extraordinary qualities and godly powers. I must admit, though I do not have any godly powers, I certainly have many extraordinary qualities.
I help everyday people using my sympathy and empathetic abilities on a regular basis. My impendent nature makes it so that I do not need others to get by in my life. I am just one of the dwindling number of self-motivated high school teenagers whom work hard to stay advanced and "ahead of the game" for their grade level and/or age. I have built a 'bullet-proof' shield around myself to avoid peer pressure and negative influences. That is why I consider myself my own present-day heroine.
I know it needs something added at the beginning, along with any other issues. Any help or suggestions?
As a students, we read about all of these different epic heroes and heroines who save the heavens and Earth, using their extraordinary qualities and godly powers. I must admit, though I do not have any godly powers, I certainly have many extraordinary qualities.
I help everyday people using my sympathy and empathetic abilities on a regular basis. My impendent nature makes it so that I do not need others to get by in my life. I am just one of the dwindling number of self-motivated high school teenagers whom work hard to stay advanced and "ahead of the game" for their grade level and/or age. I have built a 'bullet-proof' shield around myself to avoid peer pressure and negative influences. That is why I consider myself my own present-day heroine.
scoffey92
Oct 30, 2008
Undergraduate / the hardest thing in this world is to live in it - Evaluate my UCF Essay [3]
Who ever had said that "the hardest thing in this world is to live in it," was enlighteningly accurate. Most people endure some sort of hardship in their life, and many of those people grow stronger from those experiences. I am one of those people. Though I may not be an orphan, nor have I dealt with one of numerous other tragic experiences, my childhood was not all "sunshine and rainbows".
As many kids are, I was raised in a broken home, alternating between my mothers' house and my fathers' from the age of five. While at my fathers', he would home school me to the best of his capabilities. This lasted until the age of eleven, at which time I moved in with my mother permanently and started public school. Due to the fact of how advanced I was for my age, I was enrolled in the seventh grade. However, the one concept that was not fully considered or was ignored was the fact that I had little to no social skills. Just two weeks later, after the fresh start at this strange new way of life, my beloved stepfather passed away from cancer, leaving me in an emotional state I didn't understand. Even with the tragic events that had just occurred, I still managed to stay in public school, maintain my good grades, and fight the ongoing pressure and mocking set on by my peers to be like them. My mind is strong, and my will is as great. No one has power over me (except my mother, of course).
Who ever had said that "the hardest thing in this world is to live in it," was enlighteningly accurate. Most people endure some sort of hardship in their life, and many of those people grow stronger from those experiences. I am one of those people. Though I may not be an orphan, nor have I dealt with one of numerous other tragic experiences, my childhood was not all "sunshine and rainbows".
As many kids are, I was raised in a broken home, alternating between my mothers' house and my fathers' from the age of five. While at my fathers', he would home school me to the best of his capabilities. This lasted until the age of eleven, at which time I moved in with my mother permanently and started public school. Due to the fact of how advanced I was for my age, I was enrolled in the seventh grade. However, the one concept that was not fully considered or was ignored was the fact that I had little to no social skills. Just two weeks later, after the fresh start at this strange new way of life, my beloved stepfather passed away from cancer, leaving me in an emotional state I didn't understand. Even with the tragic events that had just occurred, I still managed to stay in public school, maintain my good grades, and fight the ongoing pressure and mocking set on by my peers to be like them. My mind is strong, and my will is as great. No one has power over me (except my mother, of course).