Writing Feedback / Better to be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? TOEFL [5]

TOPIC : Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

ANSWER : In my opinion, I would prefer to work for someone and later on, start my own business.
In my opinion, I would prefer to work for someone and later on, start my own business.

Everyone has his or her dreams and aspirations of being successful in todays world, and everyone choses their path in which they decide to achieve this success. This can be attained by being self employed or working for someone.

In my experience, the starting point in achieving success is to learn the tricks of the trade. Where else can you learn this if not from the experts themselves. For example a person seeking to have career in fashion maybe create a fashion line, should first of all learn what it entails to start and run a fashion line, how the fashion industry works, what is the mode or style of the moment etc. Such a person can either intern or work in a company involved in fashion such as styling agency for example. After gaining knowledge and experience, this person is most likely going to be ready to start his or her business in fashion.

Another example to be taken into consideration is before a person decides to set up a business, he needs capital i.e. money to set up this business. He or she has a choice of taking a loan from a bank but they have to consider for a fact that setting a business without any experience can be very risky. I think its better for one to work for someone, earn money and endeavor to save towards starting the business.

The path to success is not an easy one and can be achieved by starting from the bottom.
Most successful self employed people today have once been at the very bottom the ladder of success and are the ones who strived hard to be at the top.

Writing Feedback / "Reasons vary for people to attend college" - Practice TOEFL [5]

Title : People attend college or university for many different reasons( for example new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Answer:
Reasons vary for people to attend college. For example in my country Nigeria, most parents send their children to university so as to ensure they have increased knowledge and be able to secure a good job after school.

This is because in Nigeria most university graduates are likely to get better jobs than those that only have high school diplomas.

In my opinion earning a college or University degree is a security for ones future. A degree always comes in handy when applying for a job. Even if you want to start a business, knowledge gotten from school always helps.

I think it is best people attend college/uni because aside the experience does not only increase knowledge and preparation careers, but it is a medium as well which helps develop character and maturity in oneself.

For example a first time undergraduate is an18 year old who has never lived on his/her own and probably doesn't know how to take care of themselves.

College/Uni provides that platform for independence, learning responsibility, taking care of oneself etc.

Like for me, before I left for college, I never knew how to cook and was preety much lazy. I hated making my bed, But with extra neat housemates I learnt how to tidy up and cook because once a week I and my housemates would take turns in cooking.

Therefore it is very important if the opportunity is there to go to college/uni and maximize the benefits. It's a tough experience but the results a re worth it.