Writing Feedback / TOEFL-people should have hobbies and do physical activities [4]

Do you agree that people should have hobbies and do physical activities that are very different from one's work?

Whether or not people should have hobbies and do physical activities has been a controversial question. Different people have different ideas. Some people think we should focus on our jobs, but I don't agree with them. Having one's own hobbies and doing physical activities can bring us a lot of benefits.

First, having hobbies and doing physical activities is the best way to keep fit. Looking at the computer screen all day long can make us daze, so doing some sport and hobbies can prevent us from becoming to fat or short-sighted. My neighbor Tom once was a computer engineer in a big company. He ate fast food everyday and never went out to exercise. When he found out that he was too fat to find a girlfriend, he made up his mind to loose weight. He started to jog every morning. After a moth, he is thinner and finds a girlfriend.

Also, doing something for a long time can be boring, having hobbies and doing sports can refresh our mind. For example, at school, students have breaks every class so that they can relax for a few minutes and prepare for the next class. Humans are not robots; we can't keep working for twenty-four hours. Doing sports or hobbies for a short time can recharge our batteries.

Last, we should develop at least one personal hobby, not to show off, but express our emotion when we feel depressed or pressured. Playing musical instrument is a good way, I can play classical guitar. When I meet difficulties in studies, I will take my guitar and play the song Green Sleeves. It makes me feel better and gives me the confidence.

Although it may take us a lot of times to develop our personal hobbies, but doing so can bring us a healthy body, a refreshed mind and a way to release pressure and sadness. Hence, I think it is good for us to have hobbies and do physical activities which are different from our work.

PS In paragraph1, I am not clear if it is 'Some people think we(they?) should'.

Writing Feedback / "parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies" - Toefl [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If child want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies.

Watching television program and movies has always been a way of wasting time. Many children are addicted to it and spend hours watching it everyday, which makes their grades go down quickly. I truly agree that if a child wants to do well in school, parents should limit on the hours of watching TV programs or movies.

Watching too many TV programs and movies can be bad for our health, especially to our eyes. Without good eyes and a healthy body, we can't get good grades. I was a coach potato myself when I was in the fourth grade. The final exam in the third grade made me feel stressful and I planned to enjoy my summer in TV programs and movies. So I watched twenty movies and countless TV programs in a month. Soon, I discovered that I can no longer see the screen clearly and went to a hospital to cheek my eyes. After being told that I was short-sighted, I felt very regret and stopped watching TV, but all these efforts could not prevent me from wearing glasses.

Also, most TV programs and movies are easy and lack of knowledge, like "Pleasant Goat and Big Big Wolf", a TV series , which is so poplar in China that there is hardly a person, among the total of 1.3 billion population, has never heard of. However, the series can not provide us with any practical uses. In every show, the main plot is a goat called pleasant and his friends beat and trick the Big Big wolf who wants to eat the goats. I really admire "Tiger Mother" Amy Chua, she is a typical eastern mother, who is very strict to children. She never allows her daughter to watch TV programs and movies, which she calls them "garbage". Her children grow to be two very diligent and well-sighted ladies, who get a lot of prizes in music contests.

Last but not the least, the world is becoming more and more competitive. The fast growing population and technology make it harder to get good jobs. In 2009, the economic crisis caused many firms to declare bankruptcy and many young men to lose their jobs. They have to rely on governments and their parents. If parents want their children to rely on themselves, it is urgent for them to limit their children's hours of watching TV and movies and force their children to read books and review all the lessons.

Although watching TV and movies properly can help us to relax our mind and a certain type of science and history programs can be benefit for us, children are too young to control themselves from watching to much. I suggest parents limit the hours of watching TV and movies of their children.

Thanks for your reading my essay.