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Aug 18, 2011
Undergraduate / "passion for science and math" - Describe the world you come from [4]

This is just a part of my essay. I still need a conclusion. Thanks in advance for giving this a look!

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Throughout my entire academic career, I did well in all my subjects and was an active and engaged learner; however, every science class left me with a growing appetite of curiosity. The reason behind I would reference my dad's old biology books to make sure my animal cell model had all the organelles and structures, even those not included on the checklist the teacher provided. With my passion for science surmounting that of my beloved subject, math, applying this passion only left me puzzled and unsure of the future. I needed an epiphany. I hit it with the back of the head.

While playing a pick-up game of basketball, I was knocked out of the air and flew into the pole supporting the basketball rim and backboard. Everything went black like a switch was flipped. I regained consciousness within a couple seconds; however, I suffered a grade two concussion and had a distal interphalangeal joint dislocation that violently pushed the tip of my pinky finger in. I was in distraught and grew nauseous simply looking at my disfigured finger. My loving mother arrived and rushed me to the hospital. There my mother and I were in the waiting room; my head still spinning, my finger wrapped in ice thankfully shielded from view, the minutes dragging by and each heartbeat rhythmically drumming off marking me one beat closer to the doctor and hopefully salvation. And then the nurse called my name and I felt the life flow back into me. It was the shortest time I had ever spent in the room before the doctor walked in and looked at my head, asked me a couple questions about, took a brief glance at my finger and then remarked with a smirk on his face, "How tough are you?" and spontaneously popped my finger back into place. Click. And just like that it was over.

I was always fascinated by the ways doctors could 'magically' make painful problems disappear. There was always an inclination towards medicine and helping people that I had because my father was a doctor, but I did not have a good explanation that could meaningfully present my reasons why: that is until now. A gaping laceration on my lip stitched back to new with a little bit of string. A dislocated finger? Pop! It's back in place like it never happened. How is this possible? The care and 'magic' of doctors, and the medicinal field in general itself, revealed to me that I could use the passion I have of science to help people who have an affinity to getting hurt like myself.

What confirmed my resolution to pursue medicine were my high school biology courses. My interest was piqued when I entered freshmen biology with Ms. Alaimo and was strengthened by my decision to take AP biology junior year. Over the course of the year biology grew on me and I would enjoy spending extra time reading the chapters to make sure I had complete comprehension of the subject, even going so far as to read ahead of the class or study medical magazines and read online articles pertaining to advances in medical technology or famous and anomalous cases...

Tell me what you think and don't be afraid to be brutally honest if it can help me out. Thanks
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